TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec

Some people belive that working more days with shorter hours is better than working longer hours in with less days. I disagree and prefer to work longer hours each day but have more free days in the week. This way, I'' have more free time for my own activities and can same money by renting somewhere out of town.

First, When you have entire days free of work, you will have a more flexible schulde which could be used for any activity you prefer. For example, In my last job I worked for three days and had the other four days of the week to myself.Although the days I had to work I was so exhausted that I went to sleep after my arrival to home, the days which I didn't have to go to work presented me with many oppurtunities. Since I had morning free in the middle of the week, I could enroll in a German language course which had all other time slots full. In addition, I could plan to spend more time with my friends individually. I also had more free time to to spend with my family and organize outdoor activities with them. Since I had two free days just before the weekend, It meant that We could travel sooner, when the roads were less congested due to the extral load of people going out of the town. We also could leave early and scape the traffic caused by those returning to town after weekend.

Second, Since you only have to go to work for three days, you can move out of the city . This way you will save money on rent. For instance, my father had to work only for three days, so he didn't have to spend all of his income on expensive city rents. Instead we moved to suburbs and rented a big house which was cheaper. With money that my father save on rent, He could later pay for the motorgage of a brand new house.

In sum, by working three days you will have the opportunity to save more money which i could later be spens on other things. You will enjoy more free time which gives you more freedom on your free time planning.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Some people belive that working more days with shorter hours is ...
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...etter than working longer hours in with less days. I disagree and prefer to work lon...
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...e other four days of the week to myself.Although the days I had to work I was so exhaust...
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... arrival to home, the days which I didnt have to go to work presented me with man...
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...individually. I also had more free time to to spend with my family and organize outdo...
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...three days, you can move out of the city . This way you will save money on rent. F...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, second, so, for example, for instance, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1576.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.20266666667 4.8611393121 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.0734039824 2.67179642975 78% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.458666666667 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 487.8 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.6441778642 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7058823529 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0588235294 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.374399226107 0.236089414692 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136514366585 0.076458572812 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112129375463 0.0737576698707 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25660893881 0.150856017488 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0355585621442 0.0645574589148 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.53 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.08 10.9000537634 65% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.71 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 86.8835125448 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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