TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec

The time is the most precious thing that we could not enjoy comfortably in our contemporary. Almost, in every moment we have a task we should achieve quickly every day at work. In my opinion, if I had a chance to work three days for a long period weekly instead of work for the whole week, I would take that choice immediately. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will illustrate in the following essays.
First of all, this method of working would save a plenty of time to my other activities. There would be four days completely free of job mandatory. I would use this available time to invest it in recreation ways like going to the cinema with my husband and my friends. Furthermore, I would be able to bond with my child the whole day in these free times. I have a two years old boy that I have to put him with a babysitter's supervisor because of my work's schedule every day. According to my current situation, I suffer from missing my toddler during the day. However, the three-day mode of work would be a perfect solution to enjoy the rest of my week with my child.
Secondly, working only three days would make our life method more convenient. There would be fewer limitations of time. Travel, For instance, would be easier and we could have fun consistently. Travel would need no obligations because of the transportation since we could not control the time of plane or trains sometimes. For example, I remembered a time when I had to travel to my cousin in another city in Turkey on the weekend. However, the airport after couple days closed for three days because of the bad weather conditions. Likely, I had not committed to a job at that time. So, I enjoyed my vacation fully. On the other hand, if I had a job to go in the next day, I would feel terrible in that situation.
To sum up, I strongly believe that working only for three days weekly would be more fun. That is because it would give us the opportunity to do more activities. In additions, it would our life easier because there are fewer obligations of time.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 412, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'babysitters'' or 'babysitter's'?
Suggestion: babysitters'; babysitter's
...s old boy that I have to put him with a babysitters supervisor because of my works schedule...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1670.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.42970822281 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59843264115 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490716180371 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 532.8 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.0413811573 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.6086956522 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3913043478 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95652173913 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249598175269 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0840507942637 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0715893557652 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18022062558 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386935462529 0.0645574589148 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.12 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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