Throughout history job has played a prominent role in all societies. In the ancient world the main job was cultivation and herding animals which needed lots of time and energy. Since industrial revolution; a big change in this important part of humans life happened and this controvetioal question came up that it is better to work for long houres in a few days of week or work every day with less hours. I personally content that the latter; in the following paragraghs, I will delve into most outstanding reasons.
The first exqusite point to be mention is that staying concentrate is much easier in few hours working than long hours working. As an example; when I was an accountant in a firm, my working schedule change every two weeks. Some time I had to stay in the firm and work for long hours. In that period i useed to made a lots off mistakes because I lost my concentration on work.
Another equally significant point is that the results of a study conducted in my country indicate that working for long hours in long period may cause damage to mind and body. My grandfather was accountant too and he worked in a 24h hypermarket. He accustomed to coffee and cigrate to stay awake. He got insomnia and alzheimer and lung cancer in last decades of his life. Doctors told him that his disease was subsequence of his job schedule and bad habits.
finally yet importantly, As I mention in first pharagragh, when my schedule change into few hours a day, i could recreate my self return my energy which lose in work; go gem or spend good times with my friends and so next day at work, I was so sharp and creative.
To put it briefly, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realize that working for five days a week for shorter hours is the best job schedule. In this modern age with hight tech working for long time is not accepted in most countries. After all, psychologists consider job as a important factor for mental grow up and not jut for fun and income.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer hours'?
Suggestion: fewer hours
...few days of week or work every day with less hours. I personally content that the latter; ...
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun hours is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...few days of week or work every day with less hours. I personally content that the la...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ange every two weeks. Some time I had to stay in the firm and work for long hours...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a lot' or simply 'lots'?
Suggestion: a lot; lots
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Suggestion: Finally
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Suggestion: finally,
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...y schedule change into few hours a day, i could recreate my self return my energy...
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Suggestion: an
...fter all, psychologists consider job as a important factor for mental grow up and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, finally, first, if, may, so, after all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1642.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59943977591 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67195178077 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560224089636 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.3944646066 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5882352941 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.76470588235 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272888622761 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856245536108 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0713274792849 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159645824212 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0675959111672 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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