Nowadays, living in a dynamic world is considered one of the most important aspects in our lives. Many people try to adapt their lives according to the tremendous changes that surrounding them. I am sure that some people would agree that people are less happy because the world is changing so fast, while others would disagree. However, when it comes to me I totally disagree that people are less satisfied due to these quick changes. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, internet helps people to get access to endless supply of knowledge and entertainment. In the past, people took long time to communicate together and it took many days to send just an email. Today, we can catch each other in less that one second. For instance, my brother is working at a multinational company. last summer, he went to another country to attend business meeting with people from different perspective. In fact, during his trip he used his phone to find information about this new culture. Moreover, he used google map to move easily at different country. Furthermore, he would able to use his face book account and twitter to hang out with his friends at his home country. Also, he used the internet connection to play games with other friends online at the free time. So, he had a such great time finishing his business trip. In addition, when he came back to his county, he could keep in touch with his friends from other city. This is because the easy connection through the face book messenger. On the other hand, in the past, it was so hard to connect people overseas and it was so expensive to talk to them. As a result, people did not get a good chance to build a relationship with others. Besides, people did not have the ability to get their work done on time. This experience taught me that people can live better life due to the advanced technology.
In addition, the new advanced medical health system provides people with a good services to enjoy their lives. Recently, the medical team can help people to find the right medication to get rid from any chronic diseases. For example, in my home country, there are a lot of people are suffering from asthma. In the last medical conference they would able to produce new nebulizer and humidifier for these patient. So, a lot of patient can improve their medical status through this advanced technology. Furthermore, they can avoid any complication in the future. As a result, they can enjoy their lives with their family members. Consequently, they can increase their efforts at work to increase the productivity. So, this will reflect positive on the whole community. Nevertheless, In the past, people who were suffering from chronic diseases, they could not find the right solution and they could not do their regular daily activities. As you can see, people can cure from a lot of issues due to the changing in the world medical level.
In conclusion, I strongly disagree that people now are less satisfied than people at the past. This is because the new advanced technology can help people find plenty of entertainment resources, and because people can find new medical services that enable them to enjoy their lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 326, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Last
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, consequently, furthermore, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, so, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, on the whole, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 85.0 52.1666666667 163% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2676.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 560.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77857142857 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.8645985582 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.554048407 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 829.8 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.6003584229 165% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.65460705 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.7058823529 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4705882353 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.73529411765 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287323204281 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0753700110884 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0691329997026 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208339241691 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.065800932897 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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