TPO 32: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Throughout history, there were eras in which people were under the control of the governments and aristocratic groups and did not have the right to make decisions. However, the situation gradually changed and now people somewhat have the opportunity to participate in making the future of their society. In this regard, some people hold the view that these days youngsters have no influence on the important decisions which determine the future of their country. From my own perspective, this statement is not essentially correct due to some reasons. In the following paragraph, I will substantiate my viewpoint through two conspicuous reasons.
The most prominent issue that one should consider is that nowadays most of the societies are governed by a democratic system in which chief government authorities are elected by people. For example, every four years between numbers of candidates one of them is assigned as president through the election. During the election, people play a pivotal role and their votes determine which one of the political parties would take the power. In most of the countries, a great majority of the population is youngsters and their participation in the elections and their choice is determinative and certainly influence the future of their society. For example in my country youngsters are advocates of the reformist's party. Their extensive participation in the last two elections led to the dominance of the reformist's party over their rival and dramatically changed the future of our countries.
Another noticeable point coming to my mind is that besides political affairs, the future of a society highly depends on its human forces in industrial and scientific spheres. In most of the high tech companies, youngsters constitute a great portion of employees especially in research and development units and have creative ideas that if implemented, not only would be profitable for the company it would have positive impacts for the country. For instance, my supervisor has a science-based company and have employees who are all very young. They work on CT-scanners for medical applications. Once, one of the researchers proposed a creative idea about developing a dual-energy micro CT-scanner and it attracted my supervisor and they started to work on it. After almost two years they built the first dual-energy micro CT-scanner in my country. It was really profitable for the company. Furthermore, it released our country from importing this costly equipment from other countries and hence it was profitable for the government.
To make the long story short, I think it is reasonable to draw the conclusion that these days youngsters have influence on the future of their society as they play a pivotal role in elections and also their key role in industrial and scientific areas is indispensable.
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Suggestion:
... and scientific areas is indispensable.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, really, so, for example, for instance, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2390.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27593818985 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00855872798 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498896247241 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 747.0 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.129452803 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.5 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.65 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139561299815 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0421325403879 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471831749306 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0930476297007 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0470053848804 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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