TPO 26: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents' jobs.
There is no doubt that choosing a proper job is one of the critical stages in every individual's life as it partly determines the future route of their life. In this regard, some people hold the view that choosing the parent's job is more beneficial for children rather than choosing a drastically different career. Although, I do believe that children should enough freedom to choose whatever they want, but I concede this statement due to some apparent reasons. In the following paragraphs, I will cogently elaborate on my viewpoint.
The most prominent point to be mentioned is that parents are a valuable treasure of experience in their own career and if their children follow their way, they will take advantage of their parent's knowledge and their expertise. As a personal example, both of my parents are retired teachers. They were highly adept and skilfull teachers. 5 years ago, my younger sister decided to be a teacher. When she started her career as a literature teacher, she was confused about how to deal with the students, which approach is better for instructing them, and how to manage the class and maintain the class discipline. On those days, my parents really assisted her by sharing their experiences and giving her a clear insight into teaching. Because of that, she easily adjusted herself to her job environment and maintained her confidence. In fact, my parents were a privilege for my sister.
Another equally important point coming to my mind is that when parents are renowned in their career it would be much easier for children to prove themselves at their workplace. The good reputation of parents paves the way for their children to become prosperous in their careers. For instance, as other colleagues in their workplace know their parents they can easily trust them and count on them and give them responsibility. However, when nobody knows you and your background, you should hardly strive to prove yourself and your capabilities to others. Furthermore, it provides an opportunity for you to make strong connection with other adept people that know your parents and can help you to enhance your knowledge at a fast pace.
To sum up, by contemplating the previous paragraphs, it is reasonable to draw the conclusion that it would be advantageous for children to follow their parents' job as they could take advantage of their parents experience and knowledge and also make strong connections with others and progress in their career rapidly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 85, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
... is one of the critical stages in every individuals life as it partly determines the future...
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Line 7, column 319, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s and progress in their career rapidly.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, really, so, for instance, in fact, no doubt, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2068.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03163017032 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75255292718 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523114355231 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.3097360129 48.9658058833 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.888888889 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05555555556 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36662339369 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109076948542 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0827366817292 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238581470049 0.150856017488 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0392140315689 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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