Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents' jobs.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Since the dawn of civilization, people have been following to find a reasonable job that they can afford the expense of their lives and have a relaxed life. These issue has caused the heated debate among scholars whether children should follow their parents' job or choose a new and different career. Although the vast majority of people believe that it is far better they follow their parents' job some hold an opposite opinion. From my perspective, I firmly concur with the first group' s idea. I will elaborate on my points of view in the subsequent paragraphs.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that as they knew their parents' career and from childhood, they were familiar with it, it undoubtedly easy for them to continue it. Admittedly, they did not need any training and passing course because they knew all the knacks about this job. To clarify more, after the period that my father felt he is not able to do his job, my brother accepted to continue it without any hesitation. He was beside my father for a long time and he learned how he can manage it.
Another equally noteworthy point in corroborating this issue is that according to the global crisis economy, it guarantees their future job. The statistics revealed the most companies went bankrupt or they fired some of their employees as they were not able to pay their salaries. Though some persons state the opposite idea and assert everyone has a variety of interests that must follow them, I found all them absurd because if people do not have a decent job, how they can follow their dreams. Hence, it is an avoidable resort for some people especially those who are not interested in education and with this method not only can they be successful but also they probably develope this job thoroughly.
In brief, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that from several aspects, the merits of choosing parents outweigh its drawbacks. More importantly, it is axiomatic that the percentage of success and developing the economy of the country is more presumable.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 301, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, so, in brief
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83569405099 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59673104922 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56940509915 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.0355925046 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.8 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5333333333 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.73333333333 5.45110844103 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278778803538 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0954554141906 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.071507501856 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171924412063 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0765490048355 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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