TPO23: integrated writing task
The main topic of both the reading passage and the lecture is about a decline in the yellow cedar population in northeastern North America. The author of the reading proposes three hypotheses for this phenomenon. However, the lecturer believes the author's explanations are not adequate and convincing.
First of all, the author mentions the rule of insect parasites that have larvae that feed on cedar wood and kill the trees. By contrast, the lecturer refutes this premise by stating that healthy yellow cedar trees are resistance to parasites as their saturated with a powerful chemical substance which is poisonous for beetle larvae. Hence, beetles larvae can merely attack damaged or already died trees.
Secondly, the author claims another possible candidate for cedar population reduction would be bears that feed on cedar bark as it contains sugar. The aggressive behavior of bears in feeding damages the trees and weaken them. On the other hand, the speaker refuses this assertion by pointing out that yellow cedars populations have been declined in some locations that are not the habitat of bears. Therefore bears can not be responsible for overall population decline as it has occurred with or without the presence of the bears.
The final speculation that the author proposes is gradual climate change that has an impact on the root system of yellow cedar trees. It forces the surface roots to grow in late winter. Therefore these roots are more susceptible to freezing on cold nights. These frozen roots gradually kill the tree. On the contrary, the speaker rejects this hypothesis by referring to the fact that in lower elevations which have warmer climate more yellow cedar die rather than higher elevation that has lower temperatures. Hence, frozen roots can not consider as a factor for cedars population decline.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 400, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ions that are not the habitat of bears. Therefore bears can not be responsible for overal...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 187, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...e surface roots to grow in late winter. Therefore these roots are more susceptible to fre...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, second, secondly, so, therefore, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 5.01324503311 219% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1540.0 1373.03311258 112% => OK
No of words: 297.0 270.72406181 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18518518519 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53253271564 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 145.348785872 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542087542088 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 419.366225166 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.8914285514 49.2860985944 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.25 110.228320801 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5625 21.698381199 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06452816374 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.498103339262 0.272083759551 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150686160698 0.0996497079465 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557210879331 0.0662205650399 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273155964879 0.162205337803 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0962469588429 0.0443174109184 217% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.3589403974 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.2367328918 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 63.6247240618 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.