TPO 44: Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are rel

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TPO 44: Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

As you know, it is very crucial to allocate time to spend with immediate family members as it fortifies the base of their relationship. But unfortunately, nowadays both parents have to work in order to provide children with convenient living. They are usually a full-time employee and busy with their occupation, hence, do not have enough time to spend with their children. Regarding this issue, some people hold the view that for these parents the best use of time is to have fun playing games or sports, however, other people believe it is more beneficial to spend that time helping the children with their school assignment. Personally, I concur with the first viewpoint. Among various reasons which support my point of view, I will delve into three main reasons in the following paragraph.

First of all, the most prominent point to be mentioned is that playing with children and spending funny moments with each other enhance the intimacy between parents and children and bridge the gap between them. Intimacy forms trust in the relationship between children and parents hence, children consider their parents as their friend and share their problems with their parents and try to get over the difficulties with their help and companionship. By contrast, children who do not experience such moments with their parents won't develop a strong connection with them. They prefer to solve their problems on their own and sometimes run into more serious problems. Hence, it is of great importance that parents play with their children even if they have limited time.

Furthermore, according to psychological studies playing games with children has a direct impact on their creativity. Playing a game is an active learning process in which children learn how to interact with their surrounding environment and spark creative ideas for how to play a game. As a personal experience, when I was 10 years old, my father used to play brain teasers with me whenever he has free time. During the game, he shared his own experience about how to use different techniques to win the game. Sometimes I would compare different solution and would come up with a creative solution which was astonishing to my father. Therefore, I believe it is necessary that parents play with their children in their spare time in order to enhance the children's creativity and logical skills.

The final point to be mentioned regarding this issue is that children are more passionate about having funny moments with their parents. It would be tedious for them to do their school assignments with their parents. Most children prefer to do this with their classmates. Also, a private tutor can make up for parents' role and help children with their school work. By contrast, there is no alternative for parents' role in enhancing children self-confidence and mental health by allocating time to spend with them and having a good time.

In conclusion, I strongly believe parents should play with their children as it will fortify their relationship, enhance children's creativity and also there is no alternative for this role of parents.

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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, regarding, so, therefore, as for, in conclusion, you know, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2596.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 512.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0703125 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75682846001 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68418218167 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458984375 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 769.5 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4460295098 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.869565217 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2608695652 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30434782609 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.427089033049 0.236089414692 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147095918782 0.076458572812 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109178381462 0.0737576698707 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.269991002536 0.150856017488 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109341615805 0.0645574589148 169% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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