TPO 24: Integrated writing task
The main idea of both the reading passage and the lecture is about the discovery of a T.rex fossil and whether it contains actual tissues of the animal or not. The author of the passage mentions three pieces of evidence which indicate that the fossil has remnants of tissue. However, the lecturer refutes those evidence due to some reason.
First of all, the author points to the branching channels inside the bone which were the place of the blood vessel, and the presence of soft tissues inside the channel that represent blood vessels of T.rex. Conversely, the speaker claims that these are not necessarily soft tissue. Instead, the bacteria which live in hollow channels have left a trace of organic material that looks like soft tissue.
Secondly, The lecturer asserts that there are spheres in the inner part of the bone and contain iron which is the main constituent of a blood cell. Also, these spheres are of the same size as the blood cells and have a dark red center. Hence, it is probable that they are red blood cells. However, the lecturer rejects this assertion by implying that the fossil of other animals also contains something like these. The primitive animals which did not have red blood cells. Therefore it is not likely that those red spheres are the remains of red blood cells. They may have another origin. maybe they are just reddish mineral.
Finally, the author the result of an experiment shows that the bone contains collagen. Collagen is the basic component of living bone tissue. On the other hand, the lecturer rebuts this claim by declaring that collagen usually does not last over 100 years. Hence, it is not possible that 70 million years old fossil contains this protein. It should come from a recent source. For instance, human skin contains collagen and it is possible that collagen of the researcher's hand who was handling the bone has stuck to the bone.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 474, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...als which did not have red blood cells. Therefore it is not likely that those red spheres...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 590, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Maybe
...od cells. They may have another origin. maybe they are just reddish mineral. Final...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, finally, first, hence, however, look, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 12.0772626932 149% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1574.0 1373.03311258 115% => OK
No of words: 327.0 270.72406181 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81345565749 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22922984913 2.5805825403 86% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504587155963 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 480.6 419.366225166 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.9221079656 49.2860985944 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.7 110.228320801 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.35 21.698381199 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 7.06452816374 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.27373068433 374% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.47628255721 0.272083759551 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131067200908 0.0996497079465 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.09028882775 0.0662205650399 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244379578522 0.162205337803 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0783665584797 0.0443174109184 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 13.3589403974 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 12.2367328918 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.