TPO 21: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
It is crystal clear that in modern society one of the main objectives of every individual is being successful in his/her own career. There are myriad factors that lead to prospering in the future job. In this regard, some people hold the view that social skills like the ability to relate well to people are more important than studying hard in school. From my standpoint, this statement is undoubtedly true. There are several reasons that support my idea, among them I will substantiate three conspicuous ones in the following paragraphs.
The most prominent issue that should be considered is that your knowledge on its own could not be precious unless putting it into practice and it is only achievable by continuing the learning process through a pertinent job. In this respect, having the ability to effectively connect with other people especially elite groups in your profession plays a pivotal role. Interaction with experienced and knowledgeable people could definitely help you to understand new things, recognize your weaknesses and improve them, and boost your knowledge and abilities. But when you just relay on yourself or do not make a new connection with others, progression in your job would not speed up and it would be less likely to be successful.
The second point coming to mind is that when you have the ability to establish a good relationship with other people and present yourself and your abilities properly others can trust in you and your abilities and consider you a reliable person who can accomplish his/ her responsibilities. As a personal experience, 4 years ago, I was painfully shy and had serious social phobia. Although I had the required knowledge and strive for my project I was not successful as I could not present my self to others and it became a barrier for me that kept me away from materializing my ideas. On the other hand, my colleagues who had the ability to self-branding and making connections with others made progress in a short time and were more successful. Therefore, it is of great importance to have the ability to relate well to people.
Furthermore, having the ability to relate well to people would help you to build a great network of people who could link you to others if you had any obstacle or problem in your job. Hence, you could easily solve the problems within your job and do not stick to problems. Also, in some cases, this network would help you to find a better job position and pave the way for your progress. By contrast, if you have not strong connections and links it would be really hard to get higher positions. Therefore, besides studying hard, it is very important to come out of your shell and interact with others in a wise manner in order to be successful in your future job.
For short, I believe it is reasonable to draw the conclusion that having good relations with people plays a pivotal role in your success in your future career as it helps you to enhance your knowledge, improve your weaknesses, capture others' trust, and make progress and get higher positions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 314, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help you find' instead.
Suggestion: help you find
...Also, in some cases, this network would help you to find a better job position and pave the way ...
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Line 7, column 602, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a wise manner" with adverb for "wise"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... of your shell and interact with others in a wise manner in order to be successful in your futur...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, hence, if, really, second, so, therefore, well, in some cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2538.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 526.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82509505703 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73181413782 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486692015209 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 783.0 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.5192994382 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.9 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307714579096 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0997472470144 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0776630045436 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183412550535 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0654482063901 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.