TPO 46
Both the reading passage and lecture are discussing using the electronic medical record system in which information is stored in electronic databases instead of paper records. The author of the reading passage gives three main reasons why this system would be beneficial for patients, physicians, and researchers. The lecturer, on the other hand, believes the mentioned points in favor of electronic systems are not certain and strong enough and refutes all three episodes of arguments stated by the author.
First of all, the author brings up the idea that by using electronic systems the costs would be reduced significantly since paper records need a huge amount of space for storage and transferring and duplicating paper records is costly. However, by using electronic medical record systems doctors can easily get access to datasets and transfer them and it also doesn't require much space. The lecturer, by contrast, rebuts the assertion by saying that the cost-saving is not significant since physicians use paper records as an emergency backup even after adaptation of the electronic system. He also mentions that paper records have signatures that are needed for legal reasons.
Secondly, the author holds the view that electronic record systems prevent errors arise from illegible handwriting and improper transcription. The lecturer, however, contradicts this notion, explaining even after the adoption of electronic systems physicians still use pen and paper for examining the patients and writing prescriptions. Since the office staff should enter the information from the handwritten document to the electronic system those errors would not be eliminated.
Thirdly, the author claims that electronic record systems provide a good opportunity for medical researchers to easily get access to medical databases. It is very demanding and expensive to manually search between thousands of patients' paper record stored in an office. The lecturer, however, refutes the author's claim explaining that getting access to the medical databases require following strict privacy rules and obtaining many permissions also from patients and these permissions are not always guaranteed as patients can block any access to their medical information.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... datasets and transfer them and it also doesnt require much space. The lecturer, by co...
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Line 5, column 166, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...er transcription. The lecturer, however, contradicts this notion, explaining even...
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Line 5, column 339, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...the patients and writing prescriptions. Since the office staff should enter the infor...
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Line 5, column 484, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...m those errors would not be eliminated. Thirdly, the author claims that electron...
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Line 7, column 576, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ny access to their medical information.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 7.30242825607 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1912.0 1373.03311258 139% => OK
No of words: 340.0 270.72406181 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.62352941176 5.08290768461 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79168779795 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 145.348785872 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520588235294 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 419.366225166 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.7380232976 49.2860985944 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.076923077 110.228320801 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1538461538 21.698381199 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.23076923077 7.06452816374 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.562106105076 0.272083759551 207% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.218407326776 0.0996497079465 219% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113104929925 0.0662205650399 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.349566778398 0.162205337803 216% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.088995805395 0.0443174109184 201% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.3589403974 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 53.8541721854 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.0289183223 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.61 12.2367328918 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.42419426049 108% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 63.6247240618 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.7273730684 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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