TPO 53: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation.

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TPO 53: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation.

As you already know, each society has its own needs and demands and according to this each year the government authorities plan to allocate a yearly budget for different purposes. These days some of the authorities hold the view that the improvement of internet access should be the government's priority. From my own perspective, improving public transportation is more urgent than Internet access due to some apparent reasons. In the following paragraphs, I will cogently elaborate on my viewpoint.

The most prominent point I want to declare here is the importance of preserving the environment which has a direct effect on the overall health of the society. As far as I am concerned, most of the metropolitans, like Tehran that I live in, is in an emergency condition due to air pollution. Most of the month of the year, especially in winter, the air condition is not healthy for most of the susceptible groups like children and the olds. It is a direct consequence of burning fossil fuels by different vehicles. If the government allocate enough budget for building infrastructures for public transportation or its improvement, this problem will be solved, as these days most of the citizens prefer to use their own vehicles in cities and it is mainly due to inadequate and poor public transportation. Solving this problem is prior to improving internet access as it leads to more clean air and prevents the prevalence of some chronic diseases like respiratory and heart diseases which can impose a great burden on the government.

The other equally important point coming to my mind is that by spending money on the improvement of public transportation, the government could be able to save budget on other areas and use it surplus for other applications. To shed light on this issue, consider a country that has an equipped and modern system of public transportation that encourages people to use it. Therefore, the public demand for petroleum products like gasoline is at a low level as people use fewer cars. Hence, this government does not need to import an enormous amount of petroleum from other countries and can save its budget or allocate it to other areas like improving internet access or medical services. Therefore, the improvement of public transportation would have many notable and worthy subsequent consequences.

For short, contemplating the previous paragraphs, it makes sense to draw the conclusion that the improvement of public transportations should be considered as a priority by governments. Allocating money for this area would help the government to save its budget and also it would provide a more healthy environment for society.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 192, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...dget for different purposes. These days some of the authorities hold the view that the impr...
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Line 1, column 284, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...vement of internet access should be the governments priority. From my own perspective, impr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 8.0752688172 310% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2234.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12385321101 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10532079057 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477064220183 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 698.4 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.7495635932 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.411764706 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6470588235 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.76470588235 5.45110844103 32% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287452737033 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0900316393966 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065725648566 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184718740951 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421911369693 0.0645574589148 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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