TPO 32. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.

Future of a community is depend on young people, indirectly. Some people agree that teenagers have key role in decisions that is about of the future of the community and some disagree. In my opinion, impact of young people in the significant decisions that identify the future of society is totally visible. Both the economic and social future of a society depend on teenagers a lot. I feel this way for two important reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.

First, economic of a country in the future depend on young people. Educated teenagers cause one country developed and progress rather than country have no educated ones. For example, In my own country, the most people in teenagers age, familiar with practical lessons in addition to only theory studies. That be ready them for the future tasks. Education have direct connection with not only success in the future for teenagers but also for whole society and that guarantee the advance in the special country.

Second, Social future of a country is influenced by young people, parents should have acceptable behavior with their children from young age, because they learn from their parents and that make a culture of a country. For instance, when I traveled to a foreign country I saw some teenagers that were very impolite and that influence me that I imagined that indicated the social of that country while maybe my view did not right.This example illustrate that the social future of a country have relation with teenagers, too. In my view, teenagers are representative of a society.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that teenagers these days have important impact on the future decisions in a community in terms of social and economic. Education and behavior of their parents have direct impact on this problem.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1504.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 300.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01333333333 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61767496497 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 212.727598566 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466666666667 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 490.5 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.7641662106 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.266666667 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.93333333333 5.45110844103 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251711532226 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.091280996719 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497222074773 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160428180062 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0558749817908 0.0645574589148 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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