TPO 32 - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People show different views on how youngsters influence future society. While some argue that their influence is minor, in my opinion, I give my vote to the argument that teenagers are able to create influential decisions on the development of modern life. There are two reasons supporting my view which will be explored in the below essay.
On the one hand, there is argument that juveniles spend most of their time on studying and entertainment activities thus do not pay attention to important issues emerging in the community such as pollution, social conflicts. On the other hand, modern students in reality pay due attention to current threats to society and have raised their strong voice against them. Not only elder students but also elementary pupils actively demonstrate their concerns to environmental pollutions, requiring governments to act aggressively against the deterioration. As the result, youngsters have remarkable influence on state decisions. The current regulation in my country is a compelling example. High school and university students in Vietnam set up various demonstrations in 2015 to ask for the instalment of water treatment facilities in rural areas. Their voice was so important that the act was finally implemented at the beginning of 2017 after years of delay. This example shows how adolescents can affect the outcome of government activities.
Secondly, young people play an importance role on the development of nation because more and more talented juveniles have actively participated in various government identities. As such, they are able to incorporate expectations and aspirations of young people into the construction and implementation of important laws and regulations. The current Malaysian minister of sports exemplifies this idea. He is the youngest minister-elect in the history of Malaysia at the age of twenty-four. Since then, this adolescent leader has carried out a lot of improvements, renovations and greatly contributed to the development of Malaysian sports.
In conclusion, those abovementioned reasons and examples put weight to my view that young people have tremendous impacts on guaranteeing the stability and prosperity of a nation. They have arisen their wide concerns on various critical issues and strongly requested authorities to take steps to tackle these problems
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...escent leader has greatly contributed to the development of Malaysian sports. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1831.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 330.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54848484848 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19490670189 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.60303030303 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9903308563 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.705882353 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4117647059 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149832898981 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.043179651053 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407672755682 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0950357553598 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0232194094153 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.91 10.9000537634 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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