Decision making is an important part of our lives. Our decisions often cause different consequences in the future, that’s why it is so important to choose the right. Some people believe that young people have no influence on the important decision that determines the future of the society; others disagree. Even though some people might find the influence of young people because they are more active in political life by establishing new political organizations or by fighting during demonstrations. In my view, young people have no influence on the important decision for two important reasons.
The main reason is that young people are not the majority. In all well-developed countries, the majority are senior citizens. And when a community has to make a decision a young people don’t have enough votes to support their view. For example, two years ago, in my hometown, Kharkiv citizen had an option between building a new park or lowering the tax rates. The senior citizen supported the idea about the construction of the park because it would provide for them a good place for relaxing and opportunity to enjoy the nature. The young people, on the other hand, wanted to lower taxes because it would be beneficial for small business and would attract more international companies and investments in the city, as a result, it would have provided more job opportunities and increased the wealth of citizen dramatically. Because the majority wanted to build the park the second proposal was denied even though it would provide more benefits. As you can see, young people can’t influence on the important decision because they are not the majority.
Another important reason is that young people don’t have enough political power. In all countries, the government consists primarily of older people, who are usually older than forty five years, and has a small number of young people, who don't usually have enough political power to achieve their . For instance, in my country, the parliament consists of four hundred fifty representatives, that are chosen during election company, and only twelve of them are younger than thirty-five years. This tiny amount of people couldn’t oppose others and promote their own suggestions, as a result, it is hard for them to influence on an important decision. Also, they are influenced by older and became more corrupted. Older people could manipulate them in order to get more votes. As you can see, young people don’t have enough political power and just became a tool of the older governors, who have more political and economic power in their hand.
In conclusion, young people don’t influence on important decisions. Not only because they don’t have enough political power, but also because they are not the majority of the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... enough political power to achieve their . For instance, in my country, the parlia...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, well, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2373.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 456.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20394736842 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79966296247 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451754385965 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 756.9 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.8953633051 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.863636364 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7272727273 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63636363636 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203576069999 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0836829958079 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.080674181461 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142862166596 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.067363931266 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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