When it comes to the issue of whether smartphone, online games, and social networking websites will hindrance children's education or not, people may express various opinions. Some people believe that those activities are wasting children's time; others argue that parents and teachers should not avoid children from being exposed to the internet. As far as I am concerned, my personal experience and actual observation of life make me believe that smartphone, online games, and social networking websites won't make children's education task difficult, the followings are the reasons that support my opinion:
First, many parents and teachers narrow the definition of education. The true value of education doesn't lie only in learning the knowledge from textbooks, but also in the world we are living in. As smartphone and social networking websites are the new trends of the era, people have developed a new way to interact with others. For example, in the past, we use a cell phone to call the person who we know most of the time, but today, thanks to the portable device and social networking websites, we can connect with people who we are not so familiar with and make friends with them. We even can interact with foreigners and exchange new information, and I believe by doing so children can learn new things as well.
Second, it is a bias that people consider online games as a harmful recreation that wastes children time. As I think, online games do help children to relax from their pressure of life by escaping from the reality sometimes and acting another role. In addition, some of my friends who like to play an online game in their spare time tell me that it trains their fight of flight ability when they are facing a task in the game, and this experience is a lesson that people seldom have the opportunity to practice.
Third, social networking websites can help children to group study groups and discuss their homework. Social networking website, such as Facebook, provides users with a platform to upload documents, video, and other information. What's more, people can deliver messages to many people at once immediately. This platform enables children to save time and makes their discussion more efficient, helping them with a better way to improve their learning.
As all things considered, although some people may disagree with my statements, with the concrete reasons provided above, I believe my opinions are somehow attractive and convincing. Therefore, I disagree with the idea that smartphone, online games, and social networking website do harm to children's education, instead, I encourage people to make good use of them.
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
The first argument and the third argument are related.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 439 350
No. of Characters: 2167 1500
No. of Different Words: 215 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.577 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.936 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.554 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.824 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.041 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.584 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.132 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...the reasons that support my opinion: First, many parents and teachers narrow ...
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... education. The true value of education doesnt lie only in learning the knowledge from...
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...ildren can learn new things as well. Second, it is a bias that people conside...
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...om have the opportunity to practice. Third, social networking websites can he...
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...ocuments, video, and other information. Whats more, people can deliver messages to ma...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'third', 'well', 'for example', 'i think', 'in addition', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.271428571429 0.229887763892 118% => OK
Verbs: 0.151020408163 0.158761421928 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0795918367347 0.0866891130778 92% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0428571428571 0.046263068375 93% => OK
Pronouns: 0.065306122449 0.0685040099705 95% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0979591836735 0.118717715034 83% => OK
Participles: 0.0285714285714 0.0351676179071 81% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.64416451218 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.030612244898 0.0309702414327 99% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0734693877551 0.0887237588012 83% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0183673469388 0.0209618222197 88% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0204081632653 0.0139019557991 147% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2686.0 2387.08602151 113% => OK
No of words: 437.0 408.028673835 107% => OK
Chars per words: 6.14645308924 5.86048508987 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48200974243 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.402745995423 0.338922669872 119% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.279176201373 0.251872472559 111% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.210526315789 0.174417080927 121% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.128146453089 0.112833075102 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64416451218 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514874141876 0.524397521467 98% => OK
Word variations: 58.6725615822 59.2087087015 99% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6684587814 77% => OK
Sentence length: 27.3125 20.5533526081 133% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.1266540436 48.84282405 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 167.875 120.699889404 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3125 20.5533526081 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.875 0.644075263715 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.54480286738 108% => OK
Readability: 55.2301201373 45.7405998639 121% => OK
Elegance: 1.53543307087 1.45489161554 106% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285998714906 0.300154397459 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.112079015052 0.103427244359 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0581485388587 0.0752933317313 77% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.572450948219 0.497263757937 115% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.12058713094 0.151897553556 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115658832303 0.114077575197 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471988995059 0.0781384742642 60% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.262817444736 0.336927656856 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0518503821723 0.067059652881 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178823356777 0.210909579961 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412131186214 0.0618886996521 67% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8870967742 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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