TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.U

In today's society, the question of whether due to the more usage of a cell phone, online games, and social media by children, the process of educating becomes more difficult in today's world has become a controversial issue among people in many circles and camps. Different people have various types of responses to this topic based on their social, cultural, or even familial backgrounds. However, as far as I'm concerned, I believe that teaching of children becomes more difficult in comparison to the past time for some reason that I elaborate in the following paragraphs.

To begin with, the first thing comes to mind right off the bat is that while children engage in a various type of playing, they don't pay attention to their parents or educators. Playing is the most interesting activity for children. With the advent of the internet, the diversity of games augments remarkably so the children can easily fill all of their time with such amusements. In this situation, parents and teachers have to find an appealing thing to attract children attention like invite them to some group game or tell them an exciting story about imaginary creatures. Let me shed a light on my point. For instance, I remember when I was a child, I had to find some person to play with him. But nowadays, my sister's son easily give her parents' cell phone and go to the online games' website and expeditiously find a lot of people to play with them. Therefore, finding the proper time to educate children is extremely hard today.

Another noteworthy aspect that should be mentioned is that social media has a negative influence on a child. In these media, the children confront with miscellaneous types of inappropriate things that are not proper to their age such as bad movies, horrifying scene, etc. As much as kids face with these things, the process of their learning becomes more challenging. Let's make a brief explanation about that. According to the research which was published in a well-known journal, scientists found out that whatever a person has a less information about a subject, it is easier to persuade him to do some things or follow some orders. Hence, social media have a lot of disadvantages in the children educations.

In conclusion, there are a plenty of reasons to show that online games and social networks have numerous demerit on teaching process of children. Not only parents find less time to dedicate their children's teaching but also these social media fulfill the kids' minds with a lot of bad things. Consequently, it is imperative that parents control these instruments.

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Average: 8.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 20, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
In todays society, the question of whether due to the more usage of a cell phone, ...
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Line 1, column 409, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...amilial backgrounds. However, as far as Im concerned, I believe that teaching of c...
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Line 1, column 503, Rule ID: PAST_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
...mes more difficult in comparison to the past time for some reason that I elaborate in the...
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Line 3, column 129, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...gage in a various type of playing, they dont pay attention to their parents or educa...
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Line 3, column 785, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'games'' or 'game's'?
Suggestion: games'; game's
...parents cell phone and go to the online games website and expeditiously find a lot of...
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Line 5, column 369, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...heir learning becomes more challenging. Lets make a brief explanation about that. Ac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2158.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92694063927 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73718679895 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538812785388 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 672.3 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.8314063622 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.9 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219467187057 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632323445843 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0510248359047 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136674636769 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440895664872 0.0645574589148 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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