In today’s societies, the question of whether a government should place a tax on the junk food and snacks has become a controversial issue among people in many circles and camps. different people have diverse types of responses to this topic based on their social, cultural, or even familial backgrounds. However, as far as I’m concerned, I believe that the government must enact this tax for some reasons that I elaborate them in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the first thing comes to mind right off the bat is that put a tax on fatty foods can help the health condition of people. In fact, when the government legislates this tax, the price of junk foods will increase. Accordingly, the demand for these foods will diminish and people move toward more cheaper food that may be healthier. Therefore, the statistics of diseases such as diabetes and obesity that related to fatty foods will reduce noticeably. Let’s make a brief explanation about that. I remember that when the Iranian government heightened the tax of cigarette, the total numbers of cigarette that was sold annually experienced significant reduction. Hence, government’s tax not only doesn’t have any drawback but also have a lot of merits.
Another noteworthy thing that should be mentioned is that the government use their tax’s income for public affairs. In other words, the money that was gathered through junk food tax can use for advertising versus the over-consumption of snack food. So, scientific advertisement provides a lot of useful information about the demerit of fatty food. Consequently, people try to decrease this type of food from their diets. Let me shed a light on my point. According to the research that was published in a well-known journal, scientist found out that negative advertising with interesting content can have a remarkable effect on human behavior. They recognize that must of the people didn’t inform about the serious disadvantages of some harmful things. Thus, if government use the unhealthy food tax to improve the publish awareness, this tax will have a very good result.
In conclusion, there are a plenty of reasons to show that enacting tax on fatty convenient foods have a lot of advantages. First, it ameliorates the health condition of people. Second, it provides enough money to make a negative advertisement against these foods. Hence, it is essential that government place an appropriate tax on the junk foods.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2086.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20199501247 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98951012521 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5536159601 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9984762106 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8181818182 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2272727273 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.59090909091 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396671927383 0.236089414692 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110354689599 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103948551499 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256159898129 0.150856017488 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00947715995207 0.0645574589148 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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