TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.U

Educating a child is not an easy task, therefore one puts in their best to make sure children are well taught but what happens when no positive result is yielded. This may be due to some distractions either thinking of something or spending time engaging in events that adds no value to the child's life.

The task of teaching today, has become stressful than it was in the past. Some children are less focused in the class because their minds are far from the class room setting,such student is presently in class but absent minded-they think of what they could have achieved by making phone calls, playing video games, and using the social network to chat with some friends- which will one way or the other affect his/her grades in school.The impact starts affecting them gradually and if not stopped can lead to drastic academic report of such a fellow.

Nevertheless, the second problem is the time wastage. In this situation, these children are taught effortlessly in school and expected to revisit the lecture instead, they are postpone. I am a living witness to this fact where as, this lecture is eventually left on touched thereby pilling up notes.Hours are spent on browsing and playing video games especially when that time can be saved up for researches about events.This problem also adds up to being lazy about important findings. In other words it results to a reluctant nature

Conclusively, parents can help to deteriorate this habit in children by inculcating in them how to control their minds and manage time.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, well, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1280.0 1977.66487455 65% => OK
No of words: 260.0 407.700716846 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92307692308 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58810433014 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.653846153846 0.524837075471 125% => OK
syllable_count: 384.3 618.680645161 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.6003584229 39% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 129.0578843 48.9658058833 264% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 160.0 100.406767564 159% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.5 20.6045352989 158% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.625 5.45110844103 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150449793918 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07147465482 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624116154851 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0801632704884 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482762279104 0.0645574589148 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 11.7677419355 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

More content wanted.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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