We are living in a modern society with the invention of the internet, which provides people with various entertainments such as online games and social networking web sites. These entertainments make educating children a more difficult task today than it was in the past, because they spend a lot of time on them. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, children do not totally pay attention to the lecture of teachers. As far as I am concerned, children can more easily be distracted from their studies by entertainments, such as Facebook, or online games, especially when they have to study the subjects, in which they are not interested in. Moreover, children tend to think that they can find a number of information on the internet rather than concentrate on the textbooks or teachers’ lectures. For example last week I had an opportunity to attend a class in a high school. In the class, the teacher conveyed to students knowledge about William’s poem. While the teacher was lecturing, students were playing games and chatting with their friends. Eventually, when the teacher asked them some questions, none of them could answer these questions, because they did not focus on the lecture at all.
Secondly, when children spend too much time on the internet, they will be limited the ability to create new things. It is no doubt that today students do not need to learn how to calculate numbers as people calculated before. All they need to do is just ask Google or use a calculator. Moreover, children spend a lot of time chatting with their friends or playing games, so they have very little time to study and review their notes. Therefore, when they have to do their exams, they study hastily; as a result, their understanding about subjects is not deep.
Educating children is vitally important in every era. However, most children do not understand enough. They spend a lot of time on playing games or social networking web sites, which are harmful to them. I strongly believe that educating children nowadays is harder than before.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 358, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[5]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much information', 'a good deal of information'.
Suggestion: much information; a good deal of information
...ildren tend to think that they can find a number of information on the internet rather than concentrate...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, i feel, no doubt, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1756.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.918767507 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76711288998 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526610644258 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.910683908 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4210526316 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7894736842 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.10526315789 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304635800959 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0892879766994 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0827583734026 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202567505884 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0725723760028 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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