TPO-14 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays traveling becomes more and more popular than ever before. People have different ideas and reasons about their traveling. Some people like to tour in their own country, some others love to go to another country. In my point of view, I would like to travel to foreign country, I think I will learn more things from traveling to other countries than touring in my own homeland for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, by traveling to another country I am able to learn many things. We all acknowledge that traveling is the best way to gain knowledge. When we tour we tend to visit famous places. These well- known places can tell us tremendous things about their veracious history that we can only absorb by eye seeing. My own experience is a compelling example of this case. Last year I went to Holy Land. I have read many books about the Holy land, and I have knew that the climate in the Holy land is extremely hot. Therefore, water is very valuable and expensive. But, I just only understand exactly those when I was there in person. I also am comprehensive real meaning of many parables that I have read from the Bible. In contrast, if we just travel in our country we usually know about our history. So it is not interesting like traveling another country.

Secondly, traveling another country, especially, these English speaking countries enables me to practice English. I dream of speaking English fluently. Therefore, I love to go to a country, where they speak English in order to have opportunity to apply the knowledge I have learned in my class. Actually, even though, I have learned English for almost two years in my country, Vietnam, I never, met any English native speaker to practice. So, I did not feel confident to speak English out loud until last year when I moved to the U.S. Moreover, when traveling to other countries we can know more about their cultures and civilizations that we cannot learn by traveling in our own country.

In conclusion, each of us has different perspectives about the benefits of traveling. For two reasons, which I have just mentioned above, I love to go to other countries in order to learn more about their culture and I would like to go to countries, where they speak English to fulfill my dream of speaking English.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Line 2, column 150, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ling is the best way to gain knowledge. When we tour we tend to visit famous places....
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Line 2, column 461, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'known'.
Suggestion: known
...y books about the Holy land, and I have knew that the climate in the Holy land is ex...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1917.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71007371007 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6048235749 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471744471744 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 597.6 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 60.2052569786 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.347826087 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6956521739 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65217391304 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18548546345 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562636819016 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533275173615 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127787267048 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0714713372809 0.0645574589148 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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