Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
We are living in a modern society, which offers people more freedom than ever before. Nowadays young people tend to live and make their own decisions without the help of their parents. Therefore, some people consider the issue that did young people in the past depend a lot on their parents to make decision? In my opinion, I totally support the statement that before young people relied on their parents tremendously in making decisions due to the fact that they are lack of ways to get information and their lives were covered by their parents completely as well. I will explore my ideas in the following essays.
First of all, in the past young people usually lived with their parents. It is not the same us today that young people tend to live independently. They take care of themselves. They can make money to afford their lives. Hence, they can take their own responsibility for their own jobs. However, in the past parents often took care of young people in everything. They supported young children from top to toe. Living in that environment young people were prone to rely everything on their parents including whom they get marriage with. It seems to me that situation forms the character of people. Even though in some case young people wanted to make their own decision, they dared not to do so. In other words, young people were afraid of the authority of their parents or at least did not want to hurt them. A woman lives near my home is a compelling example of this case. She told me that when she was eighteen years old, she had a crush on a man near her house. They both had loved each other. She would like to marry him. However, her father arranged her to marry another man. As a result, she obeyed her father.
Secondly, people in the past did not have enough information to make their own decision. In fact, we are living in the world of technology. Obviously, we can find a great deal of information on the internet, and there are many experts in variety of fields that enable us to consult to have advice. Therefore, we can be more confident to make decision that following our own will. However, in the past, people did not have internet. Books were limited as well. As a result, following parents to make decision is a safe way and it is an understandable issue.
In conclusion, for two reasons, which I have just mentioned above, I completely agree with the statement that in the past young people tended to follow their parents to decide important things in their lives.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, at least, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2058.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60402684564 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44053850573 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480984340045 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 640.8 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.2384512733 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.6 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.06666666667 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.476784211009 0.236089414692 202% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125157512842 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118655684436 0.0737576698707 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.317576363603 0.150856017488 211% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691182121073 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.91 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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