Agreement or disagreement with the proposed statement needs a comprehensive study of children psychological facets. Today the enormous progression of technology affects human life significantly. Every day we spend a long time on the cell-phones and consequently, cell-phone has become one of inseparable parts of our life. The education is not except for cell-phones effects and children devote the majority of their life to online games or social networking applications such as Instagram and Telegram instead of studying their lessons. Hence, teachers and all other individuals involved in the educating process should pay more attention to this problem before it becomes a crisis. As far as I'm concerned, educating children is pretty difficult task than the previous decades. The following paragraphs will aptly elucidate my viewpoint through outstanding reasons.
First and foremost reason is that the majority of children use the cell-phones or laptops for playing online games or chatting with each other so, they do not have enough time for studying their lessons and it is conspicuous that the current generation will not have an acceptable knowledge in the future. By the way of example, during the high school in Iran, students are prohibited from having cell-phones inside the school and every day the manager take their cell-phones and in the evening give them back, nevertheless I remember in my high school even though there was the similar role but some students had their phones in the classes and used them for playing or chatting with each other. Therefore, my teachers had suspected about this problem and sometimes were checking students' bag. Thus, nowadays, the teacher should spend more time teaching children appropriately.
Another Important reason is that since the children are so curious and vulnerable, the immoral contents in the Websites can hurt their pure nature. According to the psychological textbooks, children during the puberty period are so sensitive about their environments and because of the physiological alternations in this spill, they are too eager about immoral contents. Based on one of the recent studies in Iran about 70 percent of students in the high schools have been affected by the immoral contents and they do not have sufficient concentration on their works. So, it's obvious, as the parents and teachers have a vital role in the children life, they should care about them if they want to have wisdom persons in the future.
In brief, with contemplating the aforementioned reasons, I can adopt a firm position that educating children is a more difficult task today than the past. Of course, the Internet can be used effectively to improve the students’ knowledge but hitherto the negative points of that overweigh positive ones.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: I'm
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, except for, in brief, of course, such as, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2357.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30855855856 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91892152569 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536036036036 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 728.1 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.0747444452 48.9658058833 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.647058824 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1176470588 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.29411764706 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263790495667 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0841101438182 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0657900438725 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158919572102 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541784409839 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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