There is no shortage of debate whether nowaday's education is completely different from the past. In this regards, many individuals hold the view that today, It is hard for parents and teachers to conduct students because of the cell phone, online game and so on. However, there are other opinions which technology could not disturb children' education. As for this writer's opinion, I subscribe to the latter idea. In what follows, I delve into the most paramount reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.
First and foremost, today, teachers can use technology for exploiting some new methods for education. On the grounds that children are enthusiastic for using the cell phone or social network, teachers have found this opportunity to encourage them. New methods may include providing a virtual group in social media for exchanging information. By way of illustration, in my nephew's school, their teacher uses a smart way. The students' homework is published in their virtual group that has been made in social media. They must shares their homework on that group until night. Every day, my nephew comes back home and checking their group is the first thing he does and after that, he forces himself to complete them as soon as possible. As a result, he became an excellent student in their class and his other classmates have shown improvement in their study, too. This example clearly illustrates my point.
Furthermore, parents, nowadays, are more aware of their children's situation. They usually have a strict schedule for their children which must be applied by them. Besides, they set some method for motivating them. One way is allowing them to spend a couple of hours on playing a video game and using their cell phone after doing their assignments. The result of a study in a local research center in my town has revealed that existing a present or a motivation for children can help them to more focus on their lessons. Vividly, using technology is one of the important methods because they love these kinds of activities.
By perusing the above paragraphs, one can infer that, although it seems cell phone and other stuff may waste students' time, they are beneficial for them. For sake of brevity, a couple of points are worth reiterating: first, they help using new methods; second, they play the role of motivation for students.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... completely different from the past. In this regards, many individuals hold the view...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...disturb children education. As for this writers opinion, I subscribe to the latter idea...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...ol, their teacher uses a smart way. The students homework is published in their virtual ...
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Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to use' or 'use'.
Suggestion: to use; use
...are worth reiterating: first, they help using new methods; second, they play the role...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, so, thus, as for, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1957.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00511508951 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61890834793 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554987212276 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.5847783973 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.9545454545 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7727272727 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.81818181818 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121603382787 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0390523571517 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0357775076957 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0839075971703 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0211993579978 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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