Jobs and any kinds of activities are significant parts of our lives. people do an activity even not for money, but for their menthal comfortence. When we do not have a job, we are anxious due to the intrinsic reason that no human matches with idleness. However, I, personally, think that having different jobs alongside together is harsh to cover all of them with a high quality for two key reasons.
First and foremost, people are not specialised in those jobs that handle cosmetically. When a person has just one job to manage, it is really easy to control his time, get professional considerably, and also give much more benefit as a resault to him or his boss at the end, in contrast with a person in the same position but having an extra part time job. As a case in point, my brother is a chef at one of the best french restaurant in Europe. On the other hand, his wife is an usual employee in an engineering company, but can not cook at home delicious enough like his partner. This is because, in fact, she has two jobs; she is a house wife besides, she works out. So, she is not professional at cooking as well as my brother. As you can see, If she did not have the second job, she could cook well enough and get specialised at cooking like my brother.
Second, people can not focus on multiple activities as well as when they do just one of them. My personal experience is a compelling of this. About five months ago, I used to study and teach in an elementary school as the same time. I used to go to school till the evenin, and study for my master degree whole the night. Finally I could not handle both of them very well because when I wanted to study I was thinking anout my students and my tomorrow duty at school and vise versa.
For the matter of conclusion people cannot do all practices with toghether because of not focusing and not being specialised.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 70, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: People
...ies are significant parts of our lives. people do an activity even not for money, but ...
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Line 3, column 343, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...n the same position but having an extra part time job. As a case in point, my brother is ...
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Line 3, column 478, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... Europe. On the other hand, his wife is an usual employee in an engineering compan...
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Line 6, column 322, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...y for my master degree whole the night. Finally I could not handle both of them very we...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, however, if, really, second, so, well, in contrast, in fact, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1532.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.38968481375 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49776544005 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54441260745 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8659795548 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.1176470588 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5294117647 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41176470588 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.093065932377 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0342015401044 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0396577800507 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0656144440975 0.150856017488 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.029522509908 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 10.9000537634 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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