TPO 39 - Independent taskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Launching a business has always been a critical decision since many factors influence the future of a business. Although some people might believe that nowadays due to the recent advancements of economics and technology predicting the future of a business is easier than the past, I would argue that since the community was less complex and market was less extended and consequently the competition was lower in the market, people could predict the future of their business to some extent; therefore they could realize which occupation would be profitable and successful in the future.

First, the society and its requirements were less complex in the past. Therefore, the number of factors which influenced the future of a career was lower. People had a very basic lifestyle, and new concepts such as fashion or style were not as important as they are today. Lower financial abilities did not provide many options for the customers to consider when they wanted to purchase a good or service. For instance, if someone required a pair of shoes he would go to the store and buy the best thing he could afford. Therefore, business owners did not have to put much effort into realizing what people like and which style they would prefer. In fact, these concepts mostly have been invented recently. On the other hand, a person who has decided to open a shoe store in the modern society should consider what is the people's taste at this specific period, what is the trend and who are the potential customers and many other factors. These factors are sometimes sophisticated and dependent on many variables. Therefore, in comparison to the past, since many multi variable factors affect the future of a business, predicting the future of business could not be accurate.

Second, the competition was less severe in comparison to the modern society. Since the competition was lower, people could have a successful career with less effort. For example, a person who had a shoe store in a town did not have to provide different styles to satisfy its customers. Due to fewer providers, people had no variety of option and had to purchase whatever was available in the shop to satisfy their basic need. In contrast, a person who decides to open a shoe store today should consider many factors such as the number of other shoe stores in the area, the styles they provide, the quality of their products etc. Thus, due to competition, several external factors influence the future of a career and not all of them could be predictable. This increases the possible risks and makes the future of a business unclear.

To sum up, based on the arguments explored above, I believe that in the past people could predict the future of their business more precisely since the market was limited and competition was much less than now.

Votes
Average: 6.4 (3 votes)
Essay Categories

Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in contrast, in fact, such as, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2340.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89539748954 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57764697563 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441422594142 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 749.7 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 89.7725459147 48.9658058833 183% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.0 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.093659458958 0.236089414692 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0302311677944 0.076458572812 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0348183149883 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0671982476237 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0151925578376 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

You will need to put less content but put one paragraph as the third reason as the e-grader suggested. like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.