TPO-40 - Independent Writing Task Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Children can be motivated by many ways when they are performing well in the school like giving wishes, candy, gifts and money. Each and everything has it's own merits and demerits. So, parent should analysis what best and suit for their kids, that very important for us to endeavor our child carrier. Among these options giving the gifts is the better way, whereas, giving money makes children enter into the bad habits.

First of all, during childhood life kids must not have more money in their hands which makes them in trouble situation. For example, imagine that one parent giving $1000 for their kids as prize for A+ grade. Even though, he may not like to spend the money in vein, the surrounding friend will tempt him to go for bad activities like going to Theater, bar, call girls and so on. Very few of them only spend money wisely, rest of them will be trapped by evil activities. And, next time, he cannot concentrate on his study which most important duty for a good student, that he will be going lose sooner or later.

Further, parents could trigger the kid's study some other alternative ways rather than giving money. For example, instead of giving money, they can give books, school bag and color pencil as prizing gift for them, So that, they will remember us through their life time, even they could transfer massage to their kids. And, it is very good practice no matter where you are and who you are, kids will remember us all the time. May be, some people think that by giving "more money for more marks" makes them always first in their class which created good reputation for the parents. Think about this way, that situation makes like game player who always to win regardless other fun activities.

Moreover, when money flows in their hands very often, sometimes they may go drug addict and other bad habits, because of that unusual behavior family and name will get spoil. Plus, they won't understand the value of the money in future. And, they will not respect the family or the society due to self dependency which not moral for a studying children. There is one old says there, that is " money make many things". Most of the times, children get spoiled because of huge money in their hands.

Finally, In order to make a kid as a great citizen for our country, we encourage them by means of books, gifts, novels and listening to leader speech that we cannot give through money. So, I, totally disagree with point which states that give money for their good grade.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 255, Rule ID: IN_VEIN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'in vain' (=unsuccessfully)?
Suggestion: in vain
...ugh, he may not like to spend the money in vein, the surrounding friend will tempt him ...
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Line 7, column 259, Rule ID: LIFE_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...at, they will remember us through their life time, even they could transfer massage to th...
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Line 10, column 226, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... wont understand the value of the money in future. And, they will not respect the family ...
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Line 13, column 272, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s that give money for their good grade.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, may, moreover, so, well, whereas, for example, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2085.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7065462754 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.1260849103 2.67179642975 80% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541760722348 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1583237693 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2857142857 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0952380952 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7619047619 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221676763682 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0741213823707 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0422805606652 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134110277793 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373328576984 0.0645574589148 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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