In my opinion, giving money to children for each high grade in the school is not good. Therefore, I disagree with the statement 'Parent offering money for their school children for each high grade'.
First, if parents give money, children study only for the money without any interest in the subject. They lack curiousness and knowledge studying for the course. which leads to lack of confidence. Although some students might get encouragement to study, I do not agree with this because they study only for the money which is not helped in their future growth. For instance, when I was studying tenth class I have a friend, she used to get money from her parents whenever she got good marks. She used to prepare for exams only for marks not to learn new things. After, completion of her engineering she was unable to get a job, because she has no skills, and she not studied with interest. Therefore parents giving money to children is not good because children may lack confidence and skills.
Second, children at that age do not know how to spend money in the right way and they might misuse the money. For instance, my parents used to give money to my brother whenever he got good marks. My brother used to spend that money by buying food and enjoying with his friends. As a result, his health got affected because of eating outside food all the time. Therefore, children spend money in a wrong way which leads to their career loss.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that giving money to children for getting good marks is not better because they lack knowledge in studies and they misuse the money.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... and knowledge studying for the course. which leads to lack of confidence. Although s...
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... and knowledge studying for the course. which leads to lack of confidence. Although s...
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...udents might get encouragement to study, I do not agree with this because they st...
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...lls, and she not studied with interest. Therefore parents giving money to children is not...
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...hildren may lack confidence and skills. Second, children at that age do not know...
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... time. Therefore, children spend money in a wrong way which leads to their career loss. In...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1348.0 1977.66487455 68% => OK
No of words: 283.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76325088339 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32087431068 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 212.727598566 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.469964664311 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 389.7 618.680645161 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.1833292703 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.25 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6875 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.875 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318261613096 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124753182801 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0943146511928 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234502089196 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0906577966872 0.0645574589148 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.77 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 86.8835125448 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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