Parents have always been worry about their children's education during time. As a matter of fact, parents are trying to tempt their children to study more and be successful in school. Parents choose different ways to do that. One of the best things that they are using nowadays is offering money to their children to get an acceptable grade in school. I strongly believe that this idea is a good one and have some positive effect on children's education.
First and foremost, offering money is a way to encourage students to study. School-age students like to make money to do something interesting during their weeks. Also, they want to compete with their peers in some aspect such as fashion in school. Consequently, they need money to do that. These kinds of money offers can help students to study better and have enough money to spend in an interesting way.
Second of all, studying with prize is fun. As we all know, children are prize lovers. They love to have give gifts or prizes. This kind of things can be fun for them. They would love to study for giving prize. For instance, I used to study in elementary school back in my home country Iran. My mother decided to do the same plan for me. I can remember that this plan was so fun for my. I was enjoying studying during semesters all the time.
Last but not least, students will be happy and satisfied during their school-age years. Children love to earn money, so they will be happy with these kinds of plans. Also, students like to be independent. Also, offering them some money for a high grade can be pleasant for them.
To sum up, parents want to see their children happy and successful. Offering some money to children can make both students and their parents satisfied and happy.
Essay evaluation report
have always been worry
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this idea is a good one and have some positive effect on children's education.
this idea is a good one and has some positive effects on children's education.
Sentence: They love to have give gifts or prizes.
Description: A verb 'to have', uninflected present tense, infinitive or is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to have and give
flaws:
No. of Different Words: 151 200
Avg. Sentence Length: 12.44 21.0 //Some compound or complex sentences/clauses wanted.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 311 350
No. of Characters: 1396 1500
No. of Different Words: 151 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.199 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.489 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.3 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 80 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 56 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 46 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 12.44 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.579 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.48 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.296 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.296 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.103 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 312, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[3]
Message: You should probably use 'offer'.
Suggestion: offer
... money to do that. These kinds of money offers can help students to study better and h...
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Line 2, column 384, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an interesting way" with adverb for "interesting"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...y better and have enough money to spend in an interesting way. Second of all, studying with prize is...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 441, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...studying during semesters all the time. Last but not least, students will be hap...
^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'first', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'for instance', 'kind of', 'such as', 'as a matter of fact', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.215517241379 0.229887763892 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.183908045977 0.158761421928 116% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0862068965517 0.0866891130778 99% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0316091954023 0.046263068375 68% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0747126436782 0.0685040099705 109% => OK
Prepositions: 0.109195402299 0.118717715034 92% => OK
Participles: 0.0402298850575 0.0351676179071 114% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.34387721599 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0632183908046 0.0309702414327 204% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00287356321839 0.00188951952338 152% => OK
Determiners: 0.066091954023 0.0887237588012 74% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0229885057471 0.0209618222197 110% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0 0.0139019557991 0% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1748.0 2387.08602151 73% => OK
No of words: 311.0 408.028673835 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.62057877814 5.86048508987 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.48200974243 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.282958199357 0.338922669872 83% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.1961414791 0.251872472559 78% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.147909967846 0.174417080927 85% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0707395498392 0.112833075102 63% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34387721599 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488745980707 0.524397521467 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 48.8321991609 59.2087087015 82% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6684587814 121% => OK
Sentence length: 12.44 20.5533526081 61% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.1633636981 48.84282405 54% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.92 120.699889404 58% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.44 20.5533526081 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.48 0.644075263715 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 32.05414791 45.7405998639 70% => OK
Elegance: 1.25742574257 1.45489161554 86% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323376172261 0.300154397459 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.123049473996 0.103427244359 119% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0818898375658 0.0752933317313 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.480257471808 0.497263757937 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.151676432858 0.151897553556 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106667308838 0.114077575197 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589755949576 0.0781384742642 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.286937005076 0.336927656856 85% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0788434425411 0.067059652881 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204973091936 0.210909579961 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0441696062496 0.0618886996521 71% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8870967742 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 17.0 8.42114695341 202% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 13.6433691756 154% => OK
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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