TPO-40 - Independent Writing Task Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The reading and the lecture both discuss the possibility of the permanent living and existence on the Venus. The author of the reading passage states that due to the extremely serious and hard condition of the Venus it is not viable to live on the surface of the Venus. The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made in the reading and he believes that it is feasible if the station is built at the height of 50 km high form the surface of the Venus.
To begin with, the author pushes forth the idea that the atmospheric pressure at Venus's surface is too high, therefore it may crush human and the spacecraft landed on the surface. In the lecture the professor completely has different idea toward this point. He asserts that if stay at the height of 50 km from the surface the atmosphere is no more dense, it is almost equal to the earth's atmosphere pressure, and it does not damage the body of spacecraft.
Furthermore, the reading states that there is no source of water and oxygen on the surface of the Venus and bringing this sources is against the permanent presence of human. While the professor notes out that in the Venus's atmosphere some chemical substances like carbon dioxide, nitrogen and sulfuric exist which can easily be used to produce water.
Finally, the writer of the reading contends that the in the atmosphere of the Venus thick layer of clouds exist which reflect almost 60 percent of the sunlight, so generating electricity is not practical. This point is challenged by the lecturer, he thinks that by building the station on height of 50 km from surface it is possible to use sun light to make power by the solar power cells because at this level more sunlight presents. Moreover he states that the reflected lights from clouds surface would be absorbs and make more energy.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 271, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...le to live on the surface of the Venus. The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made...
^^^
Line 2, column 381, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'earths'' or 'earth's'?
Suggestion: earths'; earth's
...o more dense, it is almost equal to the earths atmosphere pressure, and it does not da...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 435, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...e at this level more sunlight presents. Moreover he states that the reflected lights fro...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1484.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 318.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66666666667 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44764813023 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48427672956 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 460.8 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.6551524981 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.909090909 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9090909091 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.90909090909 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0513167233739 0.236089414692 22% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0221935426533 0.076458572812 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0242106196233 0.0737576698707 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0333187317546 0.150856017488 22% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0133507591546 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.4 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 271, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...le to live on the surface of the Venus. The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made...
^^^
Line 2, column 381, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'earths'' or 'earth's'?
Suggestion: earths'; earth's
...o more dense, it is almost equal to the earths atmosphere pressure, and it does not da...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 435, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...e at this level more sunlight presents. Moreover he states that the reflected lights fro...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1484.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 318.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66666666667 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44764813023 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48427672956 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 460.8 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.6551524981 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.909090909 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9090909091 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.90909090909 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0513167233739 0.236089414692 22% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0221935426533 0.076458572812 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0242106196233 0.0737576698707 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0333187317546 0.150856017488 22% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0133507591546 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.4 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.