Tpo 40- Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Most of the parents are concerned about the success of their children. Academic success is defined as one of the achievement that most of the parents would like their children gain. Some of them believe that they can facilitate their children success by giving them gifts for each high score that they gain in school. However, other hold the view that giving children money as an encouragement has disadvantages for children academic life and children behaviour. I strongly agree with latter group opinion that parents should pay attention to long-term consequences of this action.
Giving money to children for achieving high marks in school does not allow them to learn the purpose of education. In fact, the main reason of education is that gaining essential knowledge to work in favour filed in future, so the education is beneficial for the person. However, if parents give encourage their children financially, their children may learn that study for their parents. In other words, they will not learn that education achievements are not limited to parents gift and it has further benefit for them. Therefore, this method of encouraging misleads the children from the educational success in long term.
This method of encouraging has negative effects on children personality. Indeed, parents increase the tendency of their children to getting higher scores without considering their talent, so this action increases cheating tendency in the children. In other words, the prize that parents that have been chosen by parents are tempting, so it can lead students to cheat for getting higher scores to receive the prize. As we know, cheating has a lot of disadvantage on children personalities. Most of the psychologist has known cheating as a first step of facing with danger for children, since these students learn that they can do forbidden behaviour secretly. Therefore, this step increases the chance of doing more forbidden action by the cheater students. In sum, this behavior disadvantage is not comparable with the small advantage that parents can see in their children grads.
To put it into a nutshell, I strongly agree that parents should not give their children financial prize for the high score in their school. This action misleads the children from the purpose of studying. Moreover, It has undeniable disadvantage on the children personality. In my opinion, parents should consider their children talents. Engineers and doctors are not the only specialists that the society needs. Parents should lead their children to improve their talents, instead of pushing them to get higher scores in math or physic.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 214, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ntial knowledge to work in favour filed in future, so the education is beneficial for the...
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Line 3, column 473, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'parent'.
Suggestion: parent
...ucation achievements are not limited to parents gift and it has further benefit for the...
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'in fact', 'in my opinion', 'in other words']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.262931034483 0.229887763892 114% => OK
Verbs: 0.165948275862 0.158761421928 105% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0689655172414 0.0866891130778 80% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0366379310345 0.046263068375 79% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0668103448276 0.0685040099705 98% => OK
Prepositions: 0.161637931034 0.118717715034 136% => OK
Participles: 0.051724137931 0.0351676179071 147% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.70005473849 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0237068965517 0.0309702414327 77% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0840517241379 0.0887237588012 95% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0237068965517 0.0209618222197 113% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00431034482759 0.0139019557991 31% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2633.0 2387.08602151 110% => OK
No of words: 422.0 408.028673835 103% => OK
Chars per words: 6.23933649289 5.86048508987 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.400473933649 0.338922669872 118% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.327014218009 0.251872472559 130% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.222748815166 0.174417080927 128% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.125592417062 0.112833075102 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70005473849 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457345971564 0.524397521467 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 49.6714028222 59.2087087015 84% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 18.347826087 20.5533526081 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.9700925421 48.84282405 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.47826087 120.699889404 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.347826087 20.5533526081 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.434782608696 0.644075263715 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 51.0492478879 45.7405998639 112% => OK
Elegance: 1.768 1.45489161554 122% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238219017922 0.300154397459 79% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.11859339134 0.103427244359 115% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.107382678224 0.0752933317313 143% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.491871056195 0.497263757937 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.108073804006 0.151897553556 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100636609857 0.114077575197 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061960019841 0.0781384742642 79% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.502682435586 0.336927656856 149% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0128637833418 0.067059652881 19% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190830731063 0.210909579961 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0243108410953 0.0618886996521 39% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.86379928315 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.42114695341 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.4623655914 244% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 13.6433691756 154% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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