tpo 46

Essay topics:

tpo 46

The reading and the lecture discuss possible advantages of using the electronic database for storing patient records. The passage claims that using electronic records has undeniable benefits. However, the speaker brings up three reasons to rebut all dubious idea presented in the passage and states that the writer has exaggerated about the upsides of electronic records.
First of all, the writer holds the view that it helps doctors to save money and time, since they do not need space for storing paper records. In contrast, the lecturer refutes this idea and underlines the fact that the electronic form of recording does not reduce need for paper working. In fact, most doctors who use this form of storing data use the traditional form of storing patients’ data as backup. Therefore, it does not cause any reducing cost, since they still need some space for storing the paper forms. In addition, patients signatures needed that can be collected in the paper forms.
Second of all, the author contends that electronic records reduce the number of possible errors. However, the speaker contradicts this contention and asserts that the factor of poor handwriting will not be removed in electronic records. Indeed, most doctors use pens for writing descriptions and their staff type doctor's handwriting. Therefore, the doctor's staff have interpreted with what the doctor has written.
Finally, the writer states that electronic records facilitate researching. On the contrary, the lecture rebuts this statement and stresses that the researcher’s access to the database has been limited by strict patient privacy law. In other words, researchers should ask patient permission for accessing their information, so researchers should follow many complicated processes to have access to patient medical records.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 110, Rule ID: NEEDNT_TO_DO_AND_DONT_NEED_DO[3]
Message: Did you mean 'to space'?
Suggestion: to space
... money and time, since they do not need space for storing paper records. In contrast,...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'second', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'in addition', 'in contrast', 'in fact', 'first of all', 'in other words', 'on the contrary']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.278125 0.261695866417 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.190625 0.158904122519 120% => OK
Adjectives: 0.06875 0.0723426182421 95% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0375 0.0435111971325 86% => OK
Pronouns: 0.01875 0.0277247811725 68% => OK
Prepositions: 0.125 0.128828473217 97% => OK
Participles: 0.071875 0.0370669169778 194% => Less participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.73632977339 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Infinitives: 0.015625 0.0208969081088 75% => OK
Particles: 0.003125 0.00154638098197 202% => OK
Determiners: 0.109375 0.128158765124 85% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0125 0.0158828679856 79% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00625 0.0114777025283 54% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1822.0 1645.83664459 111% => OK
No of words: 282.0 271.125827815 104% => OK
Chars per words: 6.4609929078 6.08160592843 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.04852973271 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.432624113475 0.374372842146 116% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.343971631206 0.287516216867 120% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.209219858156 0.187439937562 112% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.141843971631 0.113142543107 125% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73632977339 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528368794326 0.539623497131 98% => OK
Word variations: 52.6656953443 53.8517498576 98% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0529801325 115% => OK
Sentence length: 18.8 21.7502111507 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9082947618 49.3711431718 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.466666667 132.220823453 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8 21.7502111507 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.933333333333 0.878197800319 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.39072847682 29% => OK
Readability: 53.1971631206 50.5018328374 105% => OK
Elegance: 1.92405063291 1.90840788429 101% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.582218011849 0.549887131256 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.145268849591 0.142949733639 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0704157009316 0.0787303798458 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.575123692595 0.631733273073 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.123572871806 0.139662658121 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.247841013044 0.266732575781 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0878230229338 0.103435571967 85% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.366597650386 0.414875509568 88% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0573228086393 0.0530846634433 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.406823553605 0.40443939384 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0348150487139 0.0528353158467 66% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.26048565121 188% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 3.0 3.49668874172 86% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.62251655629 83% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 3.1766004415 157% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 10.2958057395 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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