By and large, it is established beyond doubt that mental and physical health is the most fundamental part in every individual’s life which should be managed through different ways including playing during people’s free time. In today’s modern world, some parents are too busy to spend time with their children. However, there is a heated controversy as to whether spending parents’ free time either having recreation or help their children’s homework. I personally believe that the advantages of doing something related to the health substantially outweigh those of doing something related to the children assignments. I will completely elaborate on two outstanding reasons in the following paragraphs.
The first exquisite point worth mentioning is that living a healthy lifestyle help both of the parents and their children live an ideal life as possible. Indeed, the best life includes working, playing, and sleeping with equal time, 8 hours for each. By doing this, they can be fresh to doing their daily tasks. Also, children can become more successful in their education. From a psychological point of view, people who divide their life into these three sections, have more incentive to live. I mean, when they include playing funny games with their children in their life, they have more energy to do boring tasks at their workplace.
The second reason that I think should not be ignored is that children can do their schoolwork in the school together with their friend. Actually, it can be a proper way to develop their relationships with their friend. As a result, it leads to being successful in their future life, especially in the working relationship. However, having a fun time with their parents result in to strengthen the link between them. Take my own experience as an example. When I was a student I do my best to make a relationship with my classmate to do my homework in the best manner. In the other word, participating in the group help me doing my assignments with the help of other students more accurately in a less time and give me more time to spend with my family.
All in all, taking all the aforementioned into account, as far as the living an ideal life is concerned, it is suggested that parents who have not enough time spent with their children, play funny games or sport with them not only because of being healthier but also because of making a good relationships with their children in a balanced way. In my opinion, children can do their homework with their friends in the school and make more friendly the hostile atmosphere of the school.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 366, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
... However, there is a heated controversy as to whether spending parents' free time either...
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Line 5, column 455, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
.... Take my own experience as an example. When I was a student I do my best to make a ...
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Line 5, column 622, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to do' or 'do'.
Suggestion: to do; do
...ord, participating in the group help me doing my assignments with the help of other s...
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Line 7, column 293, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'relationship'?
Suggestion: relationship
...thier but also because of making a good relationships with their children in a balanced way. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, second, so, then, as to, i mean, i think, as a result, by and large, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2179.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98627002288 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85703782695 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514874141876 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 648.9 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.1341194923 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.95 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.85 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.365844731338 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116852664549 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.073465614515 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236754734245 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287156540104 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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