TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

There is no shortage of debate about the value of the relationship between the kids and their parents. In fact, parenthood is a huge responsibility and so necessary to take that into our consideration. The importance of the way how we spend this time with them is highly significant. personally speaking, I prefer to be with my kids in their leisure activities. I like to share them their enjoyable time besides, practicing my parenting. I have my own reasons for that which I will explore in the following essay.

Firstly, students learn a lot in their school. They spend the whole day practice science, math, in addition to social studies Once children reach home need to refresh their minds and relax their bodies. They are in a dire need to have something totally different. I as a parent enjoy spending my free time with my kids in their leisure activities such as walking or during the sports time. For example, my children enrolled in a soccer programme which of course has a practice and live game weekly. I watch them and I play with them. Also, I provide some advice to improve the way they practice. Moreover, I play my role as a dad to plant some concepts and values. For instance, I focus on the values of sports like healthy minds live in healthy bodies. Furthermore, No matter what you win or lose in a game it is just a game.

Secondly, on the other hand, some people contradict what I mentioned above. They think that to spend their spare time doing school assignments. My friend John is a compelling example of his view. He helps his son to finish his homework.
In fact, he is mostly feeling exhausted every day, so he just tries to get it done. Consequently, he does some errors which seem silly mistakes on his son papers. Moreover, John loses a great to play with his own kid once the assignments are done
It is the time to get in the bed.

To sum up, Kids spend a long time in school with their teachers learning and practicing. The homework will be simple. Parents should use their valuable time to relieve their stress. In addition to that wisely have fun sharing their sports and leisure time.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact, of course, such as, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1758.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60209424084 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57500622414 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528795811518 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.8077369305 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 65.1111111111 100.406767564 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.1481481481 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07407407407 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273451896835 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071197320138 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0676221993089 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149733510991 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0736366547857 0.0645574589148 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.3 11.7677419355 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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