TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec

There is no shortage of debate that it is better to be away from our workstation for a few days within the week. I firmly believe that The one who can work fewer days can work perfectly if he stretches his days to work longer during the week. In my opinion to accomplish my work in shorter days that is my favorite task I love to do. I have my own reasons which are more fun and learning more. I will explain in details in the following essay.

To begin with, Life is cramming us daily with tasks and chores we have to do. As we grow older our responsibilities and duties consequently increase. We need to work in a job with that offers us a long time to be off work. That is why I prefer to work longer hours for three days rather than work f days a week. It is more enjoyable and I have more fun. I have plenty of time to spend with my wonderful family wife and two little kids. I have the opportunity to drive for them in different far places together. Moreover, the more time I spend with them, the more bonding and intimacy I developed with them. In addition to that, It charges me to the next working week. I go to work more happily, relaxing and feeling fresh. This enables me to stay energetic, optimistic and enjoying my working time.

Secondly, another advantage from my perspective is that giving me more to develop myself to be capable to work more professionally. When I start my job as a nurse I found out that a lot of the patients visiting our hospital are not speaking English But speaking Spanish. I decided to enroll my self in online courses to learn how to speak Spanish. Now I almost get into it. That definitely will help me no doubt to serve my patients perfectly, and professionally. If I do not have the time which is almost four complete day. I will not be able to modify and develop myself. Really that help me so much to enjoy what I am doing.

Finally, As I mentioned above the prons there are also cons. I want to add that some people do not like this kind of work schedule. They think that staying loner away from their work gets them boring and laziness. I have a friend left his job because he says the more time I am off I do not know what to do. I feel lazy and I just keep on eating and watching TV. As a result of that, he gets depressed. So he decided to leave his job and look for five days working job.

To sum up, from the above mentioned I conclude that, It is more enjoyable to work fewer days during the week than working for 5 days weekly. It gives us more free time to enjoy and bond with our families and friends. In addition to that, we will have extra free time to develop ourselves to learn more about how to make our job easier and professionally. But on the other hand It is not always prons but also there are people not on this favor.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 465, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...patients perfectly, and professionally. If I do not have the time which is almost ...
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Line 8, column 53, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rom the above mentioned I conclude that, It is more enjoyable to work fewer days ...
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Line 8, column 238, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...amilies and friends. In addition to that , we will have extra free time to develop...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, in addition, in short, no doubt, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1816.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.27294117647 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50981893323 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489411764706 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.2875946702 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.2592592593 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7407407407 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324415798453 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0916255126899 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0783670211631 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219714692866 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0873436314047 0.0645574589148 135% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.6 11.7677419355 56% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.19 10.9000537634 66% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.98 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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