TPO 54 Integrated Writing

The reading and the lecture are both about the solutions to decrease the water salinity in the Salton sea.
The author of the reading feels that there are three possible solutions to decrease water salinity.
The lecturer challenges the claims made by the author.
He thinks that these solutions are unrealistic.

To begin with, the author suggests that one of the possible solutions to remove the salts from the water is desalination.
The article mentions that by pumping water into facilities and heated. This evaporates the water into steam and leaving salt behind in addition to that, the steam will be cooled down into water-free salt.
This specific argument is challenged by the lecturer.
She claims that the procedure puts human health at risk because desalinization leaves salts and other chemicals. She illustrates her opinion by saying that one of these chemicals is selenium, which is seriously toxic if it blows out by the wind and Additionally, he says the human breath will be at risk.

Secondly, the writer suggests diluting decreases the salt level by adding more water from the ocean. He explains that the ocean water is less salt than Salton lake.
In the article, it is said that this modulation can be done by construction canals or pipelines.
The lecturer, however, refutes this by mentioning _that construction pipelines or canals depend on the local government resources. She claims that the distance between the ocean and the Salton sea is at least a hundred Kilometers. consequently, the cost will be so expensive and hence if the government has not enough resources this solution will not work.

Finally, the author suggests that the problem can be solved by constructing walls to several sections, In the small sections besides the freshwater in the small section would be directed to the large section to the lake.
In contrast, the lecturer's contradicts this suggestion. She said that is this area is geologically unstable. She elaborates on her opinion. She said that this solution may work in a short time but it would not work in the long run. The area is unstable geologically if an earthquake happens, it will lead to the destruction of the walls _and mixing the water low salinity with the high salinity water

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... solutions to decrease water salinity. The lecturer challenges the claims made by ...
^^^
Line 10, column 152, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...leaving salt behind in addition to that, the steam will be cooled down into water...
^^
Line 16, column 231, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Consequently
...n sea is at least a hundred Kilometers. consequently, the cost will be so expensive and henc...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 19, column 140, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...nstable. She elaborates on her opinion. She said that this solution may work in a s...
^^^
Line 19, column 400, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ow salinity with the high salinity water
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, finally, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, at least, in addition, in contrast, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 10.4613686534 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 22.412803532 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 30.3222958057 155% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 5.01324503311 319% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1902.0 1373.03311258 139% => OK
No of words: 375.0 270.72406181 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.072 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.04702891845 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72301271062 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 145.348785872 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 572.4 419.366225166 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 3.25607064018 399% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 13.0662251656 168% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.3508969083 49.2860985944 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4545454545 110.228320801 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0454545455 21.698381199 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04545454545 7.06452816374 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 13.0 4.09492273731 317% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.3589403974 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.83 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 63.6247240618 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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