TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

Our children are considered one of the most important aspects in our lives. Parents play huge role in their children's life. Many people believe that parents should spent their time with their kids helping them to finish their homework, while other might disagree. When it comes to me I totally prefer that parents should spend as much as they can from their children for playing and practice exercise for two important reasons which, I will demonstrate in the following essay.

To begin with, playing is very enjoyable for little kids in their childhood life. Recently, parents are very busy and most of them have tremendous issues every day. Parents cannot see their children on regular base due to their heavy schedule. So, many parents prefer to spend time with children doing fun activities. In fact, Many children prefer to enjoy their time playing with their parents and practice exercise. For instance, my little daughter going to school every day and when she back home she need to play with her dad to get refreshed after long day at school. In addition, my husband is so busy all week long and he has time for our daughter just over the weekend. So, every weekend, my husband and I take our little girl to have fun and playing many sports. Furthermore, this year we are planing to go on vacation to Italy. My daughter is so excited since she heard about that trip and she is so happy that we are taking care of her and we share her at many fun activities. This experience taught me that we have to get our kids happy by sharing them at many activities and we have to let them having fun as much as we can. This is because our children are overwhelmed by many responsibilities at school.

In addition, playing and having activities with our children give us chance to build a good relationship with them. Many parents are suffering from lacking the relationship with their kids. This is because many parents are so busy and when they have time they prefer to spend it to finish their children homework. On the other hand, children can finish their paperwork at school with their teachers. Furthermore, our children prefer to get in touch with their parents doing many activities like sports, swimming and walking. For example, my cousin has a little kids and both of them used to go for swimming every week. My cousin told me that during the swimming time he could to speak with his son and get very close to him. Moreover, after the swimming time they used to go for lunch together since then they became so close to each other. my cousin told me that right now he has a very strong relationship with his son. In fact, he can tell that he became his best friend for ever. As you can see, when we get attached to our kids in many activities and having fun time we can build strong friendship with our children.

In sum, I strongly agree that we have to spend time with our little kids doing fun activities. This is because sports and playing are very interesting for kids, and because we can build a good relationship with our children which will be very helpful for them at the future. we should encourage all parents to spend as much as they can from their free time playing with their children.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, moreover, so, then, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 102.0 43.0788530466 237% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2639.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 577.0 407.700716846 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57365684575 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90110439584 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34267092736 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.374350086655 0.524837075471 71% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 788.4 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4963316269 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.9666666667 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2333333333 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311845584378 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105434426544 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0745770918855 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225855672773 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0226368397896 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.14 8.01818996416 77% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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