Nowadays, searching for a job after graduation is considered one of the most importat aspects in our lives. We are living in a dynamic world and many people try to find job to cover a lot of expeneses. I am sure that some people believe that waiting for a job that would be more satisfying would be a great idea, while others would disagree. However, when it comes to me I tottally agree that we have to accept the first opportunity of a secure job. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, waiting for a job for a long time is very stressful for people. Recently, people have a lot of responsibilities towards their families and they have to get their children more secured. For instance, my husband is a doctor and he is working at New York hospital. In fact, he is taking specific salary per month. In addition, I am not working because I am raising my two little kids. So, my husband is considered the only source of money for my family. Consequently, he had to accept his current job eventhough he is not satisfied. This is because he has to cover our bills and he has to let our children live the life that he always dreamed of. On the other hand, if he did not accept this job, he could not be able to enjoy his life. Becides, he would be frustrated and under stress all the time. Furthermore, he would be under pressure every month due to the fixed monthy expenses. As you can see, people have to join the first career opportunity to avoid living under stress.
In addition, having a secure job provides people with a great chance to live the life that they always dreamed of. People who have a stable job can experience a great life style with their relatives. For example, my brother is living with his family at Spain and he is working at multinational company. Moreover, he is taking a great salary and his position is very stable. Last year, he got pormotion as a manger for the whole branch. So, his salary increased by ten percent. As a result, he would able to travel with his family for a long vacation. In fact, during this vacation he had a such great time with his family. Furthermore, he bought a new house with a huge back yard. I can tell that he is living excellent life style because his secured position at work. Nevertheless, if he would not join this secured career, he could not be able to live this enjoyable life. This experience taught me that we have to choose the most stable job to secure our future.
In sum, I strongly agree that we have to catch the opportunity of secure job from the beginning. This is because secured job helps people to live the life that they always dreamed off, and because waiting for more satisfying job is very hard and sometimes put people under stress.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, while, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in fact, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2267.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 513.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.41910331384 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47980952756 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.428849902534 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 728.1 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 23.0 9.59856630824 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.633019504 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 73.1290322581 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5483870968 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16129032258 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252655731874 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0783775928327 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617615451357 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205611503728 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544685236591 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.06 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.77 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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