In the modern world, due to the fast-paced life, parents could spend less time with their kids. Since the time is limited, many people think parents should spend time on doing the schoolwork together with their children. However, from my perspective, I hold the counterargument that a good parent should spend more time to play with their kids.
To begin with, it is a common situation that nowadays the parents share less common topic with their kids. since the developed technology makes the generation gap increase in a dramatic spend. To illustrate this opinion, I would like to use the example of my childhood. When I was young, I felt that I can hardly communicate with my parents, since the only topic between us is my academic score. If i want to talk about the game with my parents, they would say that I was wasting of my life. Although I want to share my habits with my parent, they would not feel interested since they do not know it. Even if now I am getting alone with them, I still wonder that whether if we could establish a better relationship if my parents could play with me. Therefore, I strongly believe that the parent should spend more time to play with their kids.
Another reason to endorse my view is that playing together could establish the trust between the parents and the kids. The reason lies in the fact that the parents' willingness to play with their kids would left the impression to the kids that their parents would respect their hobby. Therefore, they would be more likely to tell their true feelings to their parents. This is extremely important for children's mental growth and personality formation. For example, there are plenty of bullying event just caused by the unwillingness of child to tell their parents that they are bullied in the school, since they do not believe their parents would help them or just feel shamed to say so.
Many people hold the opinion that the parent should help their children on their schoolwork since they believe that it could help children to get a high score in the school. In effect, thank to the modern technology, the children could get help from the internet. They can discuss in the online chatting group and even directly found the answer in the internet . Consequently, I still consider that it is no necessary for parents to help their kids on schoolwork.
To wrap it up, although it could be hard to tell which one is superior in the first place, especially when it is taken into the consideration under the complicated situations in the real world, after contemplation, I still give my support to the view that the parent should pay more effort to play with their kids.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, so, still, therefore, for example, to begin with, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2200.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 468.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70085470085 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48909405569 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.442307692308 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 639.9 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0631729844 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.761904762 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2857142857 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85714285714 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238390868993 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0876206717972 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0795916592519 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150131584556 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0837270614293 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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