TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

As a matter of fact, spending time with children has always been a big concern for humankind. Some people think, children should spend their time by some activities related to their school. On the other hand, others believe in contrast. In my view, children need to spend their free time by some games or sports, because of lot of reasons such as finding new friends, being happier etc.

First of all, a child, who his/her parents have no free time to spend with, needs some people to hanging around. A good friend is the best choice. Spending time with some peers is a good suggestion for these kind of children, because they can find more friend during these games. From the top of my head, I can remember my sister when she was three years old. My parents bought a big house in that time and they had a big loan on it. They have spent most of their time in the work. Also, I was a teenager and I have some different hobbies. I decided to talk to one of my friends about bringing her sister to our house, who was 4 years old. We had a defined schedule. Whenever my friend and I met, our sisters met too. They are friends for 16 years now. They learned to be independent and spend their time with each other.

Second of all, sports and other social activities make children happy. Most of children think their parents are not attractive enough for them. They need more energetic activities to be happy. Spending time with other peers in games or sports can help children to be happy even without their families.
Third of all, it is fun. Most of top rated schools around the world do not need more homework after school hours. Students can be free and enjoy after their school. Students can do games and enjoy that without any guilty feelings about wasting time.
To sum up, children can enjoy of their life even without their families. They can do games or sports and be happy by their life.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 203, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...ith some peers is a good suggestion for these kind of children, because they can find more...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 72, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the children') or simply say ''Most children''.
Suggestion: Most of the children; Most children
... social activities make children happy. Most of children think their parents are not attractive ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'third', 'in contrast', 'kind of', 'such as', 'as a matter of fact', 'first of all', 'in my view', 'to sum up', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.239795918367 0.229887763892 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.145408163265 0.158761421928 92% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0892857142857 0.0866891130778 103% => OK
Adverbs: 0.030612244898 0.046263068375 66% => OK
Pronouns: 0.094387755102 0.0685040099705 138% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.117346938776 0.118717715034 99% => OK
Participles: 0.0255102040816 0.0351676179071 73% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.11879057178 2.67179642975 79% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0280612244898 0.0309702414327 91% => OK
Particles: 0.00255102040816 0.00188951952338 135% => OK
Determiners: 0.0739795918367 0.0887237588012 83% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0204081632653 0.0209618222197 97% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0102040816327 0.0139019557991 73% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1903.0 2387.08602151 80% => OK
No of words: 349.0 408.028673835 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45272206304 5.86048508987 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48200974243 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.266475644699 0.338922669872 79% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.180515759312 0.251872472559 72% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.0974212034384 0.174417080927 56% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0401146131805 0.112833075102 36% => More words length more than 8 chars wanted.
Word Length SD: 2.11879057178 2.67179642975 79% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489971346705 0.524397521467 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 50.9250875998 59.2087087015 86% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6684587814 126% => OK
Sentence length: 13.4230769231 20.5533526081 65% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.2508698104 48.84282405 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.1923076923 120.699889404 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.4230769231 20.5533526081 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.538461538462 0.644075263715 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 31.4746528543 45.7405998639 69% => OK
Elegance: 1.41509433962 1.45489161554 97% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.411889341148 0.300154397459 137% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0959195816525 0.103427244359 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.090403893048 0.0752933317313 120% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.421146650561 0.497263757937 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.165815874928 0.151897553556 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116719061197 0.114077575197 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0711999335236 0.0781384742642 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.261497273603 0.336927656856 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0569267875907 0.067059652881 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230092915102 0.210909579961 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0715709412578 0.0618886996521 116% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8870967742 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.42114695341 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.6433691756 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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