Which way do you think is the best for a student to make new friends?
1. Joining a sports team
2. Participate in community activities
3. Traveling
Undoubtedly, we need friends to make a convival rapport around us to improve our interpersonal communication abilities. Conversation and meeting friends help us to share our thoughts and ideas about diverse issues in different emotional situations which is a benefit for our mental and emotional health. While some pupils like to travel or join asport team to make friends, I believe that taking part to a community activity is the best way to make new, good friends. In the following essay I will elaborate on my reasons.
To begin with, community activities provide students a golden oppoprtunity to meet diverse people from different ages, races, and attitude, whcih help them broaden their perspective. The safe and good part of community institutes is those folks gather based on a benovollant desicions. Fundamentally, people who devote their time and other their resources in those social services have a desirable long which is worth joining them. To pot it into perspective, when I was a sophomore in the Boston collage, I joined to the Watertown Liberary community service gathering in which I met many different people, specially emigrants from many contries. Not only we talk about the daily issues in our local community such as some spring gathering, but also I get familiar with enormous information about those countries whcih I have not read in no books or have not heard from other media. Had not I joined that community activity in liberary, I could not gotten so much data about different countries across the world from a first hand resource.
Furthermore, community gathering is more lasting events that people could get familiar and have had their friendships for longer time ratehr than friends through travel or even friends from sports team. Some times we make a short-time friendship through our travels. We get aquintanses through sports team, but the chance to make a close friendship whcih has a longer prospective in a community centers is bigger. For example, my father has several old-friends that they have known one another since they have lived in our hometown. They were not classmates or sportmates, since those friends terminated their close relation several years after graduatetion for any reasons. In contrast, friendship through these community activities has a potential that gather students together even after their school time.
In conclusion, I believe that community activities are the best way of making friends for students. This is becasue they meet multitude people with different attitude and making a good friendship with these chance is easier and improve their perspective. In addition, they can make a longer fraternity whcih last longer than school years.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2283.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22425629291 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80056570409 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514874141876 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 709.2 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9267677739 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.157894737 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42105263158 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2941131577 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0953062738387 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0935145299234 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18663807945 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496439258704 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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