Nowadays, almost all of the parents are found to be busy with schedules involving their workplace or businesses they have set up and they barely have any time to spend with their children. Unlike the olden days, it has become quite hard for the modern day parents to make some time out of their tight schedule to take care of their kids. This is usually disappointing for the young kids as they crave for their parent's love and care, but, they can efficiently use the time when their parents are out of reach to do something productive. The time period in which they would have missed their parents can be utilized to do schoolwork with other kids going through the same situation. I would like to support my choice with some specific reasons.
Doing things related to schoolwork with their friends during the time when their parents are away will be a benefit. Their schoolwork will be already completed by the time their parents reach home and so, they can use rest of the time to enjoy their parent's company. The time in which they could have longed for their parent's company will be efficiently utilized in completing their daily studies. Since, they were busy with their studies, they would not miss their parents and at the same time their work will also be done. This approach of using their time in doing works related to school in the company of others will permit them spend quality time with their busy parents. Thus, they will neither miss their parents much, nor will they lag back in their schoolwork and they will also get the opportunity to cuddle with their parents.
The second reason includes the benefit of group studying. If the young ones of busy parents are allowed to study in the company of their friends, they will mos probably enjoy the company of each other. It will, in turn, help them forget the lingering sadness they feel from time to time because of their parent's long absence. Moreover, benefits and advantages of studying in groups will be bestowed on them and their scholastic performances will improve. For example, when I was in high school, me and two of our best friends were going through the situation of badly missing the company of our parents as their workplace demanded their presence till 8 o' clock at night. So, one day our parents decided that the three of us will stay and study together until our parents get of from work and pick us up. As time went, we started to enjoy our new schedule of studying till 8 o' clock because we did not feel lonely anymore. In the middle of our studies we also took tea-breaks and refreshed ourselves with short entertainments like dancing together to a song or watching a movie. Out bond became stronger and studying together improved our grades. We could share among us the details of current affairs which would have been a boring thing to do alone. To sum up, all the three of us were benefited by the "study in group" method.
Using that time to go out and play with others would have kept us refreshed and happy, but, we would not have got the chance to enjoy the rest of our time with our parents. Thus, in my opinion, utilizing the time in which our parents are away from us to do work related to school with our friends is much more advantageous than using that time to play games.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 18, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
Nowadays, almost all of the parents are found to be busy with sched...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, second, so, thus, for example, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 9.8082437276 245% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 79.0 43.0788530466 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 96.0 52.1666666667 184% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2704.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 589.0 407.700716846 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59083191851 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92639038232 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26748103592 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.426146010187 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 810.9 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4665285212 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.666666667 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5416666667 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324204078794 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118392537133 0.076458572812 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.09017065618 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244450529096 0.150856017488 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0701424092805 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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