TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

With the advancement of technology in all the aspects, life has become more and more sophisticated. But, the sophisticated modern life is now paralleled by complexities in various fields. To cope with this new complex life, people need to develop certain plans and then carry out these plans in an organized way. Most of the time, it is seen that young people fall prey to the confusing traps of the modern life and so, planning their schedules is of utmost importance to them. I definitely approve that the young people should live a planned life and would like to support my choice with certain justifications.

First of all, we should consider the diversions a young person should overcome in this modern world and how having a planned schedule makes this easily possible. The raging urge to indulge ourselves in the internet, getting involved in social networks for long hours and becoming a game-addict are some of the challenges young people faces on a daily basis in this modern life. All these above mentioned diversions act as obstacles in young people's life and prevents them from realizing their true goals in life. But, maintaining a very tight schedule with back-to-back plans in their daily life can block these diversions. For instance, my brother was a game-addict and slowly he became totally uninterested in studies. His performance level hit the rock bottom and it bothered him as his HSLC exams were approaching. So, he came and sought help from me about improving his career and quitting gaming habit. I advised him to maintain a routine about how he will spend the day and told him to diligently follow that schedule. He took my advice and tried to plan and organize his daily life very strictly. This helped him to overcome his addiction to games and his scholastic performance improved too.

Second point that makes the ability to plan and organize a very desirable quality in modern days is that it makes people efficient and competitive. People who maintains a very organized life are seen to be happier and more satisfied with whatever they do. Planning something prior to executing it makes the person to have an overall idea about how to make the activity more successful. And this ability of planning and organizing whatever we do increases our demand in the field of jobs as employees with great efficiency are always preferred.

Again, the chaos and emotional breakdown felt at the time when something we are working on fails can be minimized if it is planned previously. We already know about the expected fails we might face in a certain project, be it an exclusive one or something which we do on a regular basis, and so we remain prepared for them. This helps us to remain at peace which is possible only if we organize or plan something former to executing it.

The benefit that more time becomes available to us when we maintain a planned and organized life is worth mentioning. Modern life barely allows young people to enjoy free time, but, if we arrange our daily schedules in a routined manner then it will definitely allow us to have extra time which we can spend in the ways we want. For example, when I was in the senior secondary school, I used to work many part-time jobs after the classes. But, after coming back home I usually wasted about two hours watching the tb or scrolling down the social-networking sites which prevented me from having an organized study time. Soon, I realized my own fault after blaming the part time jobs for it and so, I developed the habit of maintaining a routine. This helped me have long study hours even after working part-time jobs and also enabled me to go out with my friends.

Finally, young people who maintains a planned life are seen to be very discipline. Self-discipline can be achieved by planning and organizing our day to day lives. People who are discipline always get respected and are sought after by various job markets which is definitely an advantage. Hence, it is essential for the young people to have the ability to plan and organize so that they can live a smooth and satisfied life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 299, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ng hours and becoming a game-addict are some of the challenges young people faces on a dail...
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Line 9, column 667, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...realized my own fault after blaming the part time jobs for it and so, I developed the hab...
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Line 9, column 770, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'studied'.
Suggestion: studied
...ing a routine. This helped me have long study hours even after working part-time jobs...
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Line 11, column 172, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...organizing our day to day lives. People who are discipline always get respected and are...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, if, second, so, then, for example, for instance, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 13.8261648746 231% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 85.0 43.0788530466 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 87.0 52.1666666667 167% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3393.0 1977.66487455 172% => OK
No of words: 709.0 407.700716846 174% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7856135402 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.16014088096 4.48103885553 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66097366636 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 321.0 212.727598566 151% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452750352609 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1081.8 618.680645161 175% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.9919075466 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.03125 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.15625 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.96875 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250743549102 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.076617738153 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604660460209 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151862898305 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0692840686278 0.0645574589148 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 86.8835125448 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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