Tpo 44Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are relate

Childhood is utmost important period for all individuals. Parents plays a crucial role in this period of children's lives. Some people think that parents should involve with children in playing games and other leisure activities in their free time, however, some believes that children should be encouraged for their education whenever parents have free time to spend with their children. As per my perspectives, the former view carries more weight. I take the position on account for the following reasons.
Primarily, extracurricular activities and sports would definitely improve children's mental health. In today's education system, children are facing more competitions among other students which would create education burden on them. Also, children may not concentrate well on studies, and if they are forced to study for long hours without taking any breaks. For instance, one of my friend’s mother was very strict in her education and always pressurized her to study without spending time in outdoor activities. Eventually, my friend got into depression due to her strict schedule. She had not only threatened her health, also took break from studies almost entire year. Instead, if children are asked to play sports with their parents, they would be really happy and actively participate in games which creates a strong bond between parents and children relationship. Also, children will be more attentive when they start learning again. Thus, it is obvious that such breaks help them to enhance their education level.
Secondly, after working for long hours at workplace, parents do not get time for themselves. On the other side, nowadays juveniles more likely to spend their free time in indoor activities like playing video games and spend time on internet. As a result, they have become obese and lazy. Thus, getting involved in outdoor activities will help children as well as parents to boost their personal health which is very essential for them in their current lifestyle. My own experience is a compelling example of this. when I was in school, my father planned a schedule for me. We used to play different games every day in evening time and we have been following the same schedule till today. Thus, that daily activity helped us to maintain physical health as well as mental health.
Moreover, parents who spend their time playing with teenagers, can teach them social as well as personal life lessons. For instance, as I mentioned earlier, since my childhood, me and my father have been playing sports games in free time, which helped me to build some qualities like leadership, teamwork, commitment and physical coordination. Also, I could learn to be stable mentally whenever I lose in games. All in all, all these qualities have made my life much easier, which might have not possible if my father did not spend his time with me in extracurricular activities during my childhood.
In conclusion, it is judicious to say that having fun together and make memorable memories with children is significant for every family and right way for children to have a happy and dynamic life.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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...ldren to have a happy and dynamic life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2612.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 507.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15187376726 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66197812682 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520710059172 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 790.2 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.1889165838 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.7407407407 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7777777778 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.74074074074 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300377542795 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722291912984 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0808293110903 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184396479535 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0617895432862 0.0645574589148 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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