TPO-45 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for universities to invest in infrastructure and physical plant than to invest in keeping the faculty satisfied. Use specific reasons and examples
Every year the government allocates some funds to universities to improve their facilities and faculties. (there always have been budgets which government allocates to universities to improve their facilities and faculties). This budget is highly important because it helps to improve the rank of university. For this reason, it has been questioned whether it is better to spend this on physical instruments or try to please professors. From my vantage point, the former is far better. In the next paragraphs, I will delve into two reasons to elaborate my standpoint.
Firstly, anarchic, when a set wants to handle a huge number of people, is the first thing comes to mind so it needs enough budget to prevent it. To elaborate on this point, both necessary facilities such as buses to transfer scholars within the campus, cafeterias to feed the students, and so on or recreation facilities such as gym, music room … all need when a myriad of people gather together in a place. Do the managers not care about them, they will face problems. My own experience demonstrates this matter. Having plenty of problems with transferring equipment, When I was in the university, Tehran University. Our dormitory was far from the main campus and we had to go there only by buses. But, unfortunately, the number of buses were too fewer to transfer those number of students. If we missed the bus, we had to walk to campus, missed most of the classes and the professors dissatisfied. After one year, the university added some more buses and therefore that chaos disappears. As you can see, care university not about physical facilities, students will face huge babel.
Second, spending the budget of the university to provide an equipment environment for students, concentrate more on their lessons. Students will be annoyed by dealing with spoiled means so they do not have energy enough to focus as much as they need on the lessons. For instance, lived in the dormitory, when I was in the university because my home was so far from Hamadan where I have studied. We had many problems there because the building was old and equipment did not work well. At some nights, the heaters turned off and lots of students got a bad cough. Furthermore, we could not sleep well because of the bad beds and awoke several times at night, therefore did not have enough focus on classes because of the bad sleeping. As you can see, if we did not have these problems, we could concentrate more on lessons.
To sum up, spending the budget of the universities is better than trying to satisfying the professors, personally. This not only prevents unwanted problems for such a huge number of students but also could provide a satisfactory situation to better performance of students.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, so, therefore, well, as to, for instance, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2294.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91220556745 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79971032608 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498929336188 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 717.3 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2043617757 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.76 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.68 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.48 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0908376948534 0.236089414692 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0272127104273 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.026980039738 0.0737576698707 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0578047380935 0.150856017488 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00869268599512 0.0645574589148 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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