Decision making has always been one of the crucial issues of human being through history. People for every task of their life have to make a decision, whether critical issues like marriage and career or daily primary task such as food choices. Although parents still have an important role in their children's decision making, I firmly believe that this role has become pale, and children, nowadays, can better make a decision for their own life. In what follows I will elaborate on my viewpoint to shed light on this issue.
First and foremost, in the information age, young people have more and easy access to the information by which they can better evaluate their situation and make a better and efficient decision for their lives. But in the past youth refer to their parents to solve their problems. The Internet provides our generation with a lot of invaluable data which makes us act more professionally. My personal experience can show this point. Five years ago, when I was going to choose a university after high school graduation, I easily search on the internet and found all the information I need in just one day. From ranking the university and its professors' value to the quality of dorms and campus. This information led me to the accurate decision, and thanks to such information everyone in my generation can leads their life properly on their own.
Furthermore, by promoting and enhancement of education system in the recent decade, young people have become more knowledgeable and more aware of the living issues and their surroundings. A good education system has an invaluable role in paving the way of living for the youth. For instance, it provides the students with a lot of useful and practical information which facilitates decision making for students. It teaches them how to make a relationship, how to select a good person for marriage, how to run a business accurately and so on. It goes without saying that this information makes the students needless to anyone in a critical situation. For me, this information was good enough to become a successful person not only in the university but also in my career life. Had I never accessed such information, I would have not been so successful.
All the aforementioned above leads us to the conclusion that young people, nowadays, have become more independent. This is because of easy access to proper and useful information through the internet, and because of the enhancement of the education system and efficient process of learning. I can anticipate that the next generation will become more independent than today and this process will never stop due to the nature of progress in the technology age.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, still, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.0752688172 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2239.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 451.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9645232816 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80254146649 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478935698448 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 715.5 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7359075851 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.619047619 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4761904762 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.19047619048 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0889865791482 0.236089414692 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0288141448907 0.076458572812 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0252673217831 0.0737576698707 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0599612088995 0.150856017488 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0126020481799 0.0645574589148 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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