There are certain considerations that everyone can take into account to investigate and examine the impact of celerities on ordinary people. Someone contends that famous entertainers and athletes have equal influences on both the youngsters and the olds. However, I asserts that their impact on young people is absolutely much greater than on the elderlies, for youths pay much more attentions on them and they are more likely to be influenced.
First and foremost, with the rapid development of technologies, the news about celebrities mainly spread via the Internet, to which youngsters have more accessibility than older people do. For example, when young adults are using their mobile phone surfing the Internet, the chances are they will encounter all kinds of news, both good and bad, about celebrities from all fields include sports, entertainment and science. As few seniors uses computer or cell phones, the information they received is much less than young adults. It is vividly clear that the reliance on the Internet determines youths are more possible to be affected by the celebrities.
Furthermore, age is another noticeable factor. No one can deny the fact that human are prone to be influenced by their peer groups. Because of the reason that most celebrities, such famous movie stars and athletes are relatively young, their life and social activities are more attractive to young people, who are as old as them. For example, I always care about what Dan Lin, a young and famous badminton player from my country, is doing. Because I love badminton, and I consider him as someone I can learn from. However, my parents just cannot understand why I am so attracted by him.
Finally, an additional support come to mind is that youngsters are more prone to be influenced by other famous people due to lack of experience from life. Nowadays, the media tend to report the fashion lifestyles of many celebrities, which appear to be quite attractive to youths. For instance, my sister is always crazy what her idol is wearing, eating, or going. She tries her best to wear the same clothes with her idol, and mimic how she behaves. In my parents' eyes, her idol wears those expensive clothes as a advertisement, which always annoys my sister.
Due to the aforementioned ground, I firmly believe that celebrities absolutely have more impact on young people than on the olds.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: assert
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Suggestion:
...try, is doing. Because I love badminton, and I consider him as someone I can lear...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, however, if, so, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1997.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04292929293 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77297449727 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560606060606 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8377335736 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.105263158 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8421052632 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73684210526 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152254108039 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0426545671591 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0420966973675 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0870308470511 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0288423813312 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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