TPO-46 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and exam

Celebrities and news about them are one of the most unavoidable things these days, its like they are everywhere, everyone is just talking about them, to lots of people their lives is just so interesting. Most os the people think they are just so important for the younger generations but some others dont. I myself agree with the fact that younger people are more involved with the celebrity issues because they dont have too many problems in life to worry about.
As you are still young and in school the only thing you need to deal with is the lessons you take and the homeworks need to be done,you have no bills to pay and stuff like that so it makes lots of sense with such a free mind you have more time to spend on following events about celebrities.
By growing old and having too much to worry about your passion for following your favoite celebrities life is decreased, you just dont have the same energy as you had before to put in such stuff because you need to cope with a lot more issues and the energy needs to be transfered, for example when you need to go to work early in the morning there is no time for you to stay up late and watch a football game as you used to do when you were a teenager, otherwise you will be late or tired at work and it will infulence your functionallity at work and by the presevrence of this trend you are goning to lose your job or end up sick.
When we are growing older we are getting wiser too, of course not everyone is getting wiser but for the majority of people this could be considered as a fact. Getting wiser, you find out you need to concentrate on your own life and put all of the energy , time and effort that it takes into your own life rather than chasing some other persons. This will take away all of the favor you had to go for news about your favorite celebrity.
In conclusion, celebrities are important to lots of people, especially the younger ones, but in my point of view they will lose their importance after a while, it just needs time for the person to get older,I myself have the same experience. Although not all of the celebrities I loved lost their importance to me but there were lots of them that I loved and now I just dont care about anymore.

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Average: 6.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...the younger generations but some others dont. I myself agree with the fact that youn...
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Line 1, column 316, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[1]
Message: Use simply 'agree that'.
Suggestion: agree that
...erations but some others dont. I myself agree with the fact that younger people are more involved with t...
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Line 1, column 413, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... with the celebrity issues because they dont have too many problems in life to worry...
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Line 2, column 132, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , you
...u take and the homeworks need to be done,you have no bills to pay and stuff like tha...
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Line 3, column 131, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...celebrities life is decreased, you just dont have the same energy as you had before ...
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Line 4, column 236, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...to concentrate on your own life and put all of the energy , time and effort that it takes ...
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Line 4, column 253, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... your own life and put all of the energy , time and effort that it takes into your...
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Line 4, column 365, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...some other persons. This will take away all of the favor you had to go for news about your...
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Line 5, column 207, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , I
...t needs time for the person to get older,I myself have the same experience. Althou...
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Line 5, column 255, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... have the same experience. Although not all of the celebrities I loved lost their importan...
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Line 5, column 370, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ots of them that I loved and now I just dont care about anymore.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, still, while, for example, in conclusion, mind you, of course, talking about

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1806.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.28978622328 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29842673073 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456057007126 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 42.0 20.1344086022 209% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 148.400808623 48.9658058833 303% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 180.6 100.406767564 180% => OK
Words per sentence: 42.1 20.6045352989 204% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 8.9 5.45110844103 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179864048462 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802185652216 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500513566722 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108754642465 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0330672101257 0.0645574589148 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 11.7677419355 168% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.77 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 10.1575268817 170% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.49 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.8 10.0537634409 187% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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