TPO-46 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and exam

Artists, idols or celebrities, all depend on their fanbase, in plain words, they depend on what society thinks of them and how they influence society. But who can they influence more? young audiences or older, more mature ones? I think that young people take the opinions of their idols more seriously. I want to prove my point with the following reasons:

First, young people are immersed in pop culture. Pop culture comprises the latest trends in music, sports, and media. It is natural to think that pop celebrities target younger audiences. For example, pop songs often talk about rebellion and love, which are things that most teenagers can relate to because of the phase they are experiencing. On the other hand, older people are indifferent to modern artists and current trends.

Moreover, young people are easy to influence. There is little doubt that the criterium of teenagers is manipulable, and this is understandable, they are living in a transition on their life where nothing is stable, and so is their opinion. Accordingly, they look up to celebrities as role models, because teens think they understand them. Ultimately, they take their idol’s opinion very seriously, as if it was their own.

Although many would argue that every person is different and some adults take entertainers opinion just as serious as current generations, this could never be comparable. Most adults have families, that is their world, opposed to teens who have not find their place yet and look up for someone to guide them. Granted some adults are more juvenile, but could never be compared with a true teenager.

Finally, for all the points addressed above, I think that famous entertainers and icons are taken more seriously by younglings than adults. Because of the nature of teens and their desire to follow new trends, they relate better with icons and can appropriate of their beliefs and opinions.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 185, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Young
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Line 7, column 250, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'found'.
Suggestion: found
...ir world, opposed to teens who have not find their place yet and look up for someone...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, finally, first, if, look, moreover, so, for example, i think, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1604.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 315.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09206349206 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61413488255 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.9837598815 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.1111111111 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38888888889 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160611707937 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561002688789 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0298260347117 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0928613884919 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395519275977 0.0645574589148 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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